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Reflections Of A Scarecrow In A Field Of Dreams
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Reflections Of A Scarecrow In A Field Of Dreams |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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When you were young, struggling, hungry, full of pride and the yearning greed to learn, I sometimes left you food unsigned, just outside the broken door you locked at night with nails to keep the animals away. Quietly, at best on foggy nights, sneaking like a thief, I carried cans, sealed boxes, dry food you’d know was safe to eat, small amounts the neighbors wouldn’t see, or steal, things I knew you needed but would not connect to me. Now you’re all grown up having re-written all your past, and by laugh of chance last week, I saw you riding comfortably in a car easily worth more than me and I wondered if at last you have forgotten poverty, at last are you finally free. ©2006 by icebox . |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Your mood is coveyed very well....these poems of her could certainly inspire a book if I were a real writer. *hugs*.....jo |
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Frank W. Torres Member
since 2006-06-10
Posts 133 |
Powerful expression, and vast emotions. Nice poem Icebox, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
icebox I'm sure you know that the greatest gifts are those given without signature and that you played a role in that freedom that you wonder. And, "by laugh of chance"...love that!!  |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Thank you all for your thoughts! Martie, that kind of giving was hard for me to learn; I think it was one of this lifetime's tasks. I am still at time struggling with it. In a few cases, I have helped people who later did very bad things. In this person's case, no great harm has come from her life; she simply became wealthy (through the use of men) and lives a comfortable life but one that is stagnant. So, perhaps you see that I have trouble letting go of responsibility.  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Responsibility? I know this word...too well and I guess the right way of approaching it is that we each are responsible for our own actions, so is she. Excellent penning! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"things I knew you needed" And you, my friend, have this wonderful gift of discernment for just this very thing--and if it makes sense, you have a gift of gift-giving, that makes it easy for even those burdened by pride to accept those gifts. I would hope you never regret such a thing, for you are a gift all by yourself. And sure, yer thinking that sounds a bit much--but I mean every word.  Now tell me about the German Army.  (That's right, give her a cookie and she wants a glass of milk too!)  |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Yes, good write, icebox. Learning to give without reward is a hard lesson to learn and to continue loving when love not returned even harder. The second lesson is learning that we aren't responsible for other people's actions and, as a mother, I know that it takes a long time to crack that one. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I wanted to come in here and say similar things to you that others have...then, in all honesty I found myself thinking about how there was always a serious lack of people in my life that did feel any amount of responsibility towards me...even when by virtue of their relationship they should have...so I can understand that there are times when we do and maybe should feel responsible for another. but I have a feeling you have not failed in that...you give far more than you receive...anyone can see that. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
" she simply became wealthy (through the use of men) and lives a comfortable life but one that is stagnant." I like this. So many think they have achieved all that they thought they wanted, only to find out, it is indeed a stagnant barren life they earned...And they are still not fulfilled. You on the other hand have been there for others and have many memories, good ones and sad ones, which is not all bad. We need to have both to grow. best to you, marty And remember age is relative... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Everyone has responded in words much better than I can...this is a very touching poem including your explanation...and when one has lived with and then lost much...material things are no longer what counts..it is those who show compassion for the needed. You did and do what you feel is right and that us all one can ask from another. Nice write M |
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