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Persephone, tell me why you cry
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Persephone, tell me why you cry |
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Jess Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 243Washington |
(Purr*sef*o*nee)- In Greek myths, the goddess dragged into hell by Hades Persephone, Persephone Tell me why you cry The fields of corn have turned to dust The soil has gone dry All the farmers plant their seeds And shovel piles of snow Praying to the Gods above For crops that never grow Persephone, Persephone Your garlands have turned gray What happened to the buttercups, The narcissus in May? Where are all the flower beds That bloomed beneath your touch? What happened to the hyacinths, The irises and such? Persephone, Persephone The nymphs, they miss you so Your mother wept a stream of tears So steadily they flow When pomegranate touched your lips A tear fell from your eye Persephone, Persephone Tell me why you cry [This message has been edited by Jess (06-07-2006 11:13 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Oh, this is a treat to read! |
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Jess Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 243Washington |
you're so sweet to leave me comments so consistently! |
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Troy Member
since 2006-06-04
Posts 52B.C. |
The ancient myths boast some of the greatest stories ever created. But of course, they're really much more than that and always will be. Still, it's nice to know there are some who still mention 'the gods' occasionally and not only God. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Persephone, Persephone Your garlands have turned gray What happened to the buttercups, The narcissus in May?" I came back to highlight one stanza that I especially enjoyed.  Keep that muse busy. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I thoroughly enjoy poetry that refreshes my memory with history or mythology...what a treat! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hey Jess You are really good with rhythm and rhyme....and I like the story of this...well done! I saw your thread called, "Not Fair". You'll see that my reply will send this poem back to the top. It just works out that the more you reply, the more people will get to know you and reply to your poetry thus sending it to the top again and again depending on the number of replies. So, back to the top with you!  |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
Persephone, Persephone The nymphs, they miss you so oh! I absolutely love this. much much enjoyed. farewell the ash-tray girl |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
I knew I was going to like your writing the first time I read one of your poems, and I was right! Sure like this one. miscellanea |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Beautiful Jess! :-) |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I love it..honestly awhile ago I started writing a poem about her..her story is by far my fave.. If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Jess, I loved your poetic reenactment of her story, I loved the flow, I loved rhe repetitive chorus of Persephone, Persephone... The one thing I do hope though is that she'll not be gone for long because I do so love spring, growth, and prosperity. Enjoyed reading and God bless my poetess friend. -Bob |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
such brilliant and fantastic flow here, and a touch of class too..since the Greeks are the true masters of poetry..especially metaphor, which they considered to be the highest form of poetry..Kudos to you jess and thank you very much for the words... Goldenrose. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Jess, I am glad I read this poem...It is very well written, the flow and rhyme are impeccable and it got my attention... An "A" for sure. |
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Frank W. Torres Member
since 2006-06-10
Posts 133 |
Very smooth flowing. Well done. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
In the larger sense, your beautiful wordplay depicts the regret that leaves a desert on the field. Very pleasing write. TD |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
WOW! I Love This! I Thought of You Today, |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very beautiful! I so much enjoyd the read! Hugs~Nancy ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I, too, have written a poem of Persephone... she is a magical muse, and this poem brought her to life once again... be well, fair Poet...and write on! |
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Nelo New Member
since 2006-06-16
Posts 8Around |
I haven't read too many poems with mythology references and tie ins. I really like this one. |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Well done.....loved reading the story again!  ~sky I hope someday you get the chance to live like you were dying.... |
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The Shadow in Blue Member
since 2006-05-18
Posts 493EL, Michigan |
You had nice word choice and tied in references to the Greek Myth of Persephone and the gods well.   /\/The Editing Queen\/\ It's strange that words are so inadequate. Yet, like the asthmatic struggling for breath, so the lover must struggle for wo [This message has been edited by The Shadow in Blue (06-17-2006 07:18 PM).] |
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