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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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I can feel the raindrops though inside it seems to pour for missing are the days back when those days of evermore. I can feel them softening but the aching still remains for once upon a time there was a future and its gains. I can feel the newness of though the timing's never right of one who brings me happiness and shadowholds at night. I can feel the victory of future in the breeze for tomorrow is the "after of" that time will let me seize. I'm almost there, in outlined life with forces though unseen pushing here and pulling there as always in between. A day to mourn and celebrate a hope that each will blend remembering as if the last, a lifetime left to tend. M "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
M...your writings are always top notch.. I hope you know that, for they certainly are. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Thank you Barry...I should tell you that it was your great form of rhyming this morning that made me want to do the same...rhyme that is...  I just don't have much to write about lately, with the days spinning by and me seemingly accomplishing nothing. But I have my future thoughts in the keeping  M |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thank you...and I do understand the tick of the clock issue... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: I do love the soft melancholy in your words and the positive outlook, ever present. Beautifully expressed synchrony with the rain! Love, Margherita  |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
I can sure relate to this one. |
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Serena Junior Member
since 2006-06-25
Posts 47 |
In the beginning of this it reminded me of what I just told a poster before - that youth is best because of the lack of knowing the ultimate things that come with age. But the ending feeling I got from the poem is that the wisdom is worth the age, and that going back isn't necessary to embrace happiness in ones-self. I really loved the imagery in this one, it was as if you were whispering the poems story into my ear. Thank you for sharing  |
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Poetic Concept Member
since 2006-06-25
Posts 66God's Fingerprint |
I love the opening: "I can feel the raindrops though inside it seems to pour" like u cry physically but u cry even harder inside trying not to expose your secluded emotions found deep within your own conscienceness. I liked this it is so grounded in my opinion...good job elevation is the keep Return the favor on: Swear to God "How vain it is to sit down and write when u have not stood up to live" Anonymous (Unknown) |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Ah, but this one sings to me. Excellant. "Is any song worth singing if it doesn't help?" -- Wilco, 'Wishful Thinking' |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Maureen...I sense you getting stronger each day and that like this poem is a good thing. Enjoyed...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
You lift me, in an upturned palm. Excellent write. TD |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"A day to mourn and celebrate a hope that each will blend remembering as if the last, a lifetime left to tend." I know,...I know. And yes, you do have a lifetime left to tend. Sending heart hugs and warm birthday wishes your way. ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
*Nodding* and know what you mean. Agreeing with Margherita, too.........jo |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this was lovely, the beginning reminded me of the saddness, yet, as you went along opening each new paragraph, it became more vibrant, more alive with color...like every phase of life... very nicely done |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
I love the way you are taking us with you on your positive trip into a hopefilled future...I love this poem...*big hugs* |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
“I can feel the newness of one who brings me happiness” Now what could be better than that? Nice write! JL  Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed: |
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