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Thekidfre'
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since 2005-11-19
Posts 13


0 posted 2006-02-08 06:46 PM


somthing i just wrote to share


where are you. its been so long
I traveled though seasons and memories to find your gone

A pair we were. A match only permited by the love of heaven
Our bond and spirit left to vanish when the unworldly clock turned seven

You breathed life into my empty soul and gave me your hand
It was only fitting that I would share myself and be your man

I made a promise to provide and always take care
Fix you dinner when your too tired and brush your beautiful blonde hair

Every inch of your body that ive fondly gottten to know
Your eyes lips mind and pink peach colored toes

Ive been MIA for years but some how when I with you nothings misssing
The lack of light when were in the hallways kissing

If i ever break your heart its because I wanted you to have mine
Our future is so bright...Can you see our love shine

Your taste and style is above and beyond
Were be togather forever cause our love is that...strong



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ravenapples@yahoo.com
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since 2006-02-07
Posts 17
Los Angeles, CA
1 posted 2006-02-08 08:26 PM


Ok Ok so here's the thing Love poems can be straight foward because your talking straight to your lover.  The poem was really sweet at parts and the rhymes were good but I think you could come deeper with the content.  And use the title in the poem. How was your love blind.
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