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EagletonDiva Member
since 2006-01-11
Posts 107 |
How can I find you so beautiful? Why do I find you so.. What's the word? Hot I don't think this is right I shouldn't be so For you are so young And I am not Before you were born I had my first child Though now he's grown and gone A widow am I My heart running wild Though loving you would be wrong I think it's a crush Or maybe just lust I think I need a hobby Keep away from you I must But you look my way I begin to melt I turn awya my eyes But that's when I felt You hands upn my shoulder Your lips upon mine Our passions were ignited Our love erased time There was I time When I thought this to be wrong But now all I feel is your heart All hear here is this song Lyn Eagleton 02/06/06 *Note - I love people. They are endless inspiration. I know of a woman in this situation which is where I got the idea for this poem. It marks the beginning of a new book. Enjoy and thanks for being so kind to me here on pip talk. |
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ravenapples@yahoo.com Junior Member
since 2006-02-07
Posts 17Los Angeles, CA |
I like the topic but I think you gotta get deeper into it. Say less, tell more. You don't have to explain it all you just have to make them understand. Make us feel how she felt. |
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EagletonDiva Member
since 2006-01-11
Posts 107 |
Yeah, thanks. I know it's not very good, but then I think few of mine are. I have more like this that are... well different, maybe someday I'll post them. |
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marcel Senior Member
since 2003-03-02
Posts 660az, usa |
I feel the passion and soft voice in this...a voice some might be afraid to let sing...Nicely done. |
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poetry_queen Member
since 2006-02-02
Posts 94england, |
really enjoyed this poem, keep up the good work  |
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