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Zhou yu's train
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RedStoneEB Senior Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 772uk 
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Another japanese film that catch my emotions in a net of love and tears heres my poem about it Zhou yu's train Love, where are you planning on going? You’ve not yet seen this place to know it- you’ve followed me across the river and took the train to the place your heart hides, Yet you only know the place that I live- up the old steps towards my open arms and we’ve danced in my hallways. I never knew what to say but kisses were words; I am the poet that write your voice- and you heart it back knowing I am yours are you mine or is it me the poet? You once said you never loved me the person- just the poet for his words how was I meant to feel or say. To smile is to be happy in a sense, But never fake the feeling- I’ve made that lake the essence of you and cried the same amount, Beauty isn’t what most see in the distance- it is up close written all over our soul waiting to be melted in the lovers form. Is it so hard to love me as a person? Because the poet is running out of words- and what love shall I give you but silence waiting only to speak those kisses as words, You never came back to me after you left I heard that you drowned in that river and so did the poet in me. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Is it so hard to love me as a person? Because the poet is running out of words- and what love shall I give you but silence" There are times when silence speaks louder than words.  Well done. Hugs~Nancy In the midst of winter, |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
I never knew what to say but kisses were words; I am the poet that write your voice- and you heart it back knowing I am yours are you mine or is it me the poet? Once I asked myself the same questions and thought I knew the answers. Perhaps, mistaken. This hits me hard tonight. I really like your writing, incidentally. miscellanea |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
what an interesting write, RedStone indeed, why is it sometimes easier to love the poet rather than the person as a total being? |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"I’ve made that lake the essence of you and cried the same amount" Nice job Lee. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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Katerie Member
since 2006-01-27
Posts 92Central New York |
Awesome. I do understand it as is, but would perhaps have a better understanding of it as a whole if I'd seen the movie. It's very eloquent. |
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RedStoneEB Senior Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 772uk |
Thanks for all the lovely replies glad you enjoyed it |
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LifeSinger Junior Member
since 2006-01-15
Posts 25Kentucky, USA |
This was really good, really relatable. |
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