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Open Poetry #37

Silk n Thoughts

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2006-01-27 05:49 PM

Silk n Thoughts

I walk the frustration,
a day dressed in blues
no call of the voice,
no sound to amuse.

With a smile in my heart
the day had begun
but the hours had chaptered
the fall of just one.

They say without thinking,
words hurt in their wake.
Impending the harshness
too much mine to take.

So I travel the distance
where home holds the norm,
less negative of thoughts
and a place to feel warm.

There, the black smooth of satin
holds shades of the two
eyes that can linger
silk n thoughts missing you.

Every moment a challenge
in the presence of night,
come the touch of the whispers
of the kissing delight.

So to dream in the daylight
of the darkness in blue
makes me restless tonight
in the wanting of you.

M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

Katerie
Member

since 2006-01-27

Posts 92
Central New York

1 posted 2006-01-27 06:02 PM

You produce a very nice "abcb" pattern of rhyme, which is overall very consistent, and adds phenomenally to the content, which is also good. Fit poem.

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

2 posted 2006-01-27 09:54 PM

Maureen, this is simply silk! Enjoyed it.

shades of paul
Member

since 2005-12-14

Posts 370
In Reality

3 posted 2006-01-27 10:01 PM

Your poem has a very nice flow to it...paul

shades of peace,love,and happiness to you

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

4 posted 2006-01-27 10:05 PM

Beautiful work.

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