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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Devour me Consume me Empty out this shell Shove all remaining remnants Into the depths of hell Erase me Replace me Move on without pause It’s far better if you Pretend I never was Too much sorrow Too much grief Beyond despair Beyond relief More misery Than sympathy Can break through I’ll hurt you and that won’t do… Forget me Don’t let me Ruin another day Whatever there was of me There’s nothing but decay. |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
I can’t forget you, I won’t I refuse. For this poetry Is too great, Too great to lose. Great poem, I can tell you really put your heart into it. Wonderful poetry suthern. Cheers - Ed Momma says, "Life... is like a box full of chocolates, you never know when you're gonna get one with a nut in it". |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSuthern~ I feel this one for all the right reasons, ... gone wrong~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
My suthern gal friend, you cannot be erased! Great write, but oh such a sad feel to it. You're a remarkable poetess and I'm glad to see you're writing -- I've been waiting for another one. ...jo |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Rip! Rip! Rip! I just tore up those instructions on how to devour and replace you! ~ Now I feel better! ~ I just wish that you did, my dear sweet suthern. You certainly have a talent for emoting and bringing your readers into your world. May it soon be a fuller, happier one. Loving you, Linda  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Edward: Now you've done it... wiped away my sour expression and replaced it with a smile... and I thank you most sincerely. *S* Marge: You dear... I am blessed to have you open your heart to me... even when I'm a poor guest. *S* Thank you!! iliana: I've been writing... and writing... and writing. *G* But if this is "better than"... you can imagine where my pen's been plowing (heck... you probably won't have to imagine... I'll eventually post some of them *S*) Thank you so much! *S* EA: As long as you're ripping... maybe you'd like to dispose of some notebooks for me? *S* I'm tired of me and my emoting... and seem to be stuck with both! LOL Thank you, my friend... with folks like you on my side... healing will happen... it already is. *S* LOL at myself... Don't worry, my friends... This was written on a good day... my pen just wears shades, even inside *S*) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern Come down here and I'll give that decay a big hug and  |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
suthern, Wouldn't want to erase you for anything! Such power and passion you express! I've always admired that about your writing. Glad you're back. I've missed you! miscellanea |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Instructions, seem more like destructions Perhaps Inspire me Admire me Fill me with the warmth of touch Reconnect my shattered Make my little pieces to much Light me Highlight me Shadow me with thy glow Make things to matter Teach what I need to know or something along those lines Gloom |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
So forlorn but good writing. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Seymour: I'd love to, dear friend... I truly would! *S* Thank you!! miscellanea: I've missed me, too, sweet lady... thank you so very much!! Martie: Thanks! Professor: I thank you, sir... I like that version much better... especially that 2nd verse. *S* Thank you!! The Lady: Thank you! *S* |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I put off answering this, because I wanted to be able to say something more meaninful than "it hurts to see you hurting".....but truly Laura, when I read these words that say grieving so eloquently, that is all there is in me to say. .....so.... Laura, it hurts to see you hurting. There's more to come very soon, I know...but I hope it ends then forever. You've earned a little joy, earned it the hard way. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Ratleader: I wish I was one of the great poets... maybe I'd be able to adequately express what your words mean to me. But I'm not... so I just say... thank you... so very much. |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
ah lady *shrugs and sighs* I do know 'this' better than I like to remember, and all I can say is that it does get easier... hugs |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Dear Suthern, Lady you break my heart. Such good writing but so sad. best ,martyjo |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
luminosity: Thank you, my friend... I know you know this place all too well. *S* latearrival: You know... you're gonna have to change your name. *S* For... rather than late... your arrival is always perfect. *S* Thank you so much for appreciating the write... I'm prickly-pear-sensitive about my abilities these days... so your words are particularly welcome. *S* |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh you are not going to believe me when I tell you that I could actually hear our Canadian Alanis Morissette belting this out! The anger in this is sure worth singing I tell you, and wish I had these instructions for use a few times myself.  |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
"Forget me Don’t let me Ruin another day Whatever there was of me There’s nothing but decay." NO! He's not allowed to forget you! You're so incredible that every day should be a reminder of you that he lost.  and then He created the horse... |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
Such passion in these words that I felt there nails dig into me. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Dear Suthern, I agree with all the others. You can't be erased. You will never be "decay", let alone "nothing but decay". You may be tired of your poetry, BUT WE ARE NOT! And neither Earth Angel nor anyone else, will rip your notebooks up. Emote, emote, emote! That is the way to heal. If you keep it all in, the hurts will fester, and we can't have that happen to our Suthern. - Owl |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Oh, and beautiful poem written with a golden pen! I got so carried away with what you said in it that I forgot to mention how stunning it is. - Owl |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
For me, one of the most rewarding things about posting my poems is seeing the life the words take on... what they mean to different people. *S* Today, I've been feeling the sting of being misinterpreted after an innocuous remark has caused enough pain to make me want to stomp my pen. *S* But as I read here... some of that sting is soothed... for having readers find meaning in my words I didn't see is a gift... and one I treasure. *S* For instance... I wrote this, thinking to protect the one I love from me... but... those seeing anger directed outwards made me look again... and appreciate their eyes. *S* So... I thank you... and am grateful to each and every one of you... whether you found poetry in a rant... or a rant in poetry. *S* Mysteria: I may not believe it... but I'm very complimented! *S* Thank you!!! Skyfire: May I adopt you? *S* Please? *S* Seriously... I thank you from the bottom of my heart... you made my day. *S* DLY: Your response means a lot to me... I thank you so much!! OwlSA: You honor me, dear lady... with both responses... and I appreciate both the caring and the compliment more than I can say. Thank you!!! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Beloved one if things had turned out differently than they did you would be preparing to come here so I could hug you till you yelled stop, but as it is I'll have to wait 8 mths until I can do so. But be prepared to be loved a lot then. All the family are dying to meet you darling one, and I do mean all the family. The Hoard that live in Brighton are champing at the bit to see just what I've raved about. (And they still haven't met Gray, I had a little attack of sickness so we didn't get to see them last weekend). Now as for the poem darling one the rhyme is definitely good, the sentiment I refuse to listen to since I could never throw you away, you belong in my heart and you always will do. You wouldn't want me to bleed internally now would you? And if I pulled you from the place where you grow in me I would bleed most pitiously. Like you forever Mushy x x x x Gray says to tell you hello and take care of you for you are very special xxxx Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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