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Open Poetry #37

Still Waters

Liz Sinclair
Member

since 2006-05-06

Posts 93
Atlantis

0 posted 2006-05-16 12:18 PM

Still Waters

I felt the tide shiver;
it cried for remembrance.
Back and forth, it
paraded with silent beauty.

Washed away
amidst foamy lips,
it became the memory of a
love lost in this world of
drowning sorrows.

And as it kissed the shore
for the very last time,
it crept quietly away
into the pale oblivion.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2006-05-16 01:03 AM

Nicely penned!
your word tide really pulled words back and forth

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

2 posted 2006-05-16 01:14 PM

I especially loved the first stanza - beautiful!

- Owl

Bodger
Senior Member

since 2005-06-12

Posts 1260
Tolerance for a short time

3 posted 2006-05-16 01:19 PM

I'd have called this 'Tidal Flows'.

Still waters run deep, or flow 'Not' and this moves which I liked, but was more a 'Tidal Flow or Wash'

Dave

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