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Song of a Swing
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Song of a Swing |
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openthoughts Member
since 2006-01-16
Posts 94Where the child can be free |
This marks my first of hopefully many entries on passions Song of a Swing There is a swing no wind blows this fleeting day no clouds in the misleading sky and the sun smiles down with intent on the lonely sound the song of the swing it rocks back and forth with the ominous hands of the clock counting days, counting months, counting years until the destined day beyond the end of music no words to recite or describe the forsaken melody of the swing but it long continues singing long past the moment when childhood is forgotten in the blink of an eye and the span of a life the song will change from joy to sorrow as a hand from a window high above waves down to the empty grass goodbye swing [This message has been edited by openthoughts (01-16-2006 03:12 AM).] |
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mighty mouth Junior Member
since 2006-01-05
Posts 24Missouri, USA |
It is truly sad that childish beauties must fade away isn't it? This is well captured. I enjoyed this one very much. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
WOW -- I liked this. I could just envision that lonely swing. WOW. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx for sharing this and welcome to Passions, and for a very thought provoking, visual poem. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
What excellent verse, and invigorating thoughts. Well done. Welcome to Passions. ThisDiamond |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Welcome to PipTalk! I look forward to reading more of your open thoughts! ~ These were a wonderful a debut! Your use of the swing swaying back and forth was a vivid image and was very effective in expressing your "song". Warm, welcome-aboard hugs, Earth Angel |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Welcome to the Passions family ! Much enjoyed your first post ! Looking forward to many more hugs, Chris |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS! I very much enjoyed your entrance post. Looking forward to reading more of your work. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ In the midst of winter, |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OT~ Welcome to the poetic halls of PiP !! You so captured a memory for me ... this is lovely~ I think it's possible that I hear your swing song ... on the playground of memory, right next to my sandbox - /pip/Forum94/HTML/000226.html - wanna play ? You will, no doubt, find many here that will enjoy sharing with you~ Read, read, read ... for in each of us there are thoughts of inspire to be found~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Great to have you aboard. I look forward to reading more of your work...Impressive write |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Welcome to Passions in Poetry. An very thoughtful first post. Well done. believe in what your heart feels... |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
welcome to passions...very nice opener...will be definitely looking for more |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I agree with the others..very nice writing~~ openthoughts...kind of like my nakdthoughts only just to be clear...it is not me  sometimes when names are so close to each other, people will confuse them... I wish I could have written this Young or old, you write well. Welcome!!M |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
Beautiful poem ! It touched me deeply. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
A good first write here innocence is soon lost...thank you and welcome to PIP.. Goldenrose. Desire for nothing except desirelessness,hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes, want nothing and you will have everything.avatar Meher Baba. |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
beautifully poignant haunting images and remembered music of childhood.... Terrific first post! Karen |
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