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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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A needle's eye is feathering the finery of a silk thread as I pray for some dumb luck to feign itself as mastery jabbing blind and just missing I lick the end then lick my lips as if to say "yeah I meant that" as I succumb to little pricks that stain my dainties brown. Eyelet and a daisy stitch on cotton starched to linen crisp tear drop pearls upon the hem a promise on the skirt and it's deigned the coloring of tea and sometimes there is scarcity of weave where there be treachery as threads where rubbings feign the suede as these tiny stitches fray beneath the pull of lips in plead: and yes, it was designed this way-- a virgin in a shroud. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I think this is one of the most complex metaphors I've ever tried to sort out, K. But...I think I've done it. What a profound comparison! *hugs*....j. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I must have read this 20 times.... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
check yer IM  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This one is full of heart, K... and memories.  |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
delightful dear Seren  ~hugs~  Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Got any pictures?  Oh but I think I love this the best of anything you have ever written. First - of course it is about me right? I had this peasant top blouse my Gramma made for my 11th-12th birthday. She had made it, and then hand-sewn flowers, leaves, butterflies,etc. all from tiny pieces of ribbons. If you can believe it Karen, I loved it so much that I actually wore the sleeves out, had them replaced, and Tori has it now. She is 7, and when she is 10 or so will get to finally wear it, but puts it on "to hold her." The anticipation in her builds all the time and I love that. She knows the story behind this blouse and the love attached to it, which I will bore you with some time.So? This was a metaphor  was it? Care to explain sometime, as I loved it just the way I read it like you wrote it about my Gramma and me. Yeah, yeah I know it is always about me. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Sorry - forgot to save it in my library, and print for Tori. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Karen, this was exquisit...although I don't understand it all, there is great understanding of letting go of the things... and more importantly, the things of emotion...passion.... would love a translation... Hugs to you |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I'm in awe.... sigh m  how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Oh. Some poems just take your breath away, you know? |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Great observation in this poem..you show us a clear picture of your activities..thank you... Goldenrose. Desire for nothing except desirelessness,hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes, want nothing and you will have everything.avatar Meher Baba. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you all for your time, and your interest. I've learned the hard way though, that sometimes my explanations ruin the poem for others, but ya'll know me--I'll be happy to talk to ya via e mail. Drop me a line--it could get interesting!  shaking my head just another layered metaphor folks...and gawd-I-love-this-place. I hope to find some time to read later, and I apologize for my hit and run posts of late--but I have a lovely new addition to my family--my mother-in-law has come to stay with us, and she is such delightful company that frankly, I've been spending much of my time with her. And boy oh boy, has she gots stories-- ya'll are gonna love her. I know we do.Thanks again for peeking in on this one.  |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
lord ... you leave me in awe, Serenity...everytime~ much love~ ~baby **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
enough said: as I succumb to little pricks that stain my dainties brown. am glad you are finding some peace? Kisses K. |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
Whenever I get a chance I look for you. "inappropriate content"?? my favorite kind! Loved this one , adagio (out there somewhere) p.s. call me sometime Leah wants to talk to you. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Ralph? You have a either a filthy mind or a guilty conscience. Tell Leah the phone rings both ways. (You know me with phone numbers.  ) |
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