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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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hoarse, the tide of elbows jabbing me, mocking impassable where numbers echoed about a thing ready to speak searing full color visuals from it’s depth of screams but fell, a maneuvered doom as trance wove, dainty pink slippers and that correspondence ended malignant accusations & destruction tossed into some february wind where my habitation stood like a letter with volume, smacking me hard groundcovers, with shipping addresses shoved me into boiled down questions every day, morning and evening where night became, my sultry hit man beating down the powerhouses of my own watered down acumen after 8 years passed me in complaint i kept looking up at the terrace which needed a fresh coat of paint my brain didn’t know right from left with a core somewhat autonomous like a wine bottle opener, powerfully tasting some divine form of blush there, days coupled with moments exploding monsoon rains, ruptured blush for our wretchedness for my weakness in the manner in which we treat sensor systems, of spreading friendships alcoves of termination… where i found some charm in philosophical indignation, rendering melancholy bitterness laying down airs an orbital boom blaster reimbursed summing up confident, pleased to push a light determined, i wondered about some profound system, unconnected dissecting implausible effect now, the gentleness of mind placed spaces between the days from an island with contrary ways i watched the disposal of me…thus inspired with the means to look obligated singular manners at work in some perceived merit who was it writing off spheres? forming black conspiracies the plan had been fixated in my own mind? concurring with execution and surprise quite easy, the effect of the whole man’s nature rose above me, grinning kicking every feasible ray i opened the door, and then another like some crazed sentiment ripping at the heart…. fatal love was joyfully winning… ripping off a thousand cruel circumstances from my eyes with truth and generosity there, the blackness of mysteries stood, presenting themselves with garment warding off the blows making a clean leap over every obstacle like an open jumper in a horse show sometimes ya gotta hit man with a 2 x 4 to get their attention i saw it approach, this humble merit defending me and my weakness manners expecting me along with a forsaken other, that i seemed to misplace it was a fine family reunion~ [This message has been edited by LeeJ (08-01-2005 09:03 AM).] |
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lyricpoet Member
since 2005-07-16
Posts 199NY, USA |
Loved this, excellent piece of poetry!! |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Again your choice of words Lee are important and unique..as ever i enjoyed the read immensely.. Goldenrose. Desire for nothing except desirelessness,hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes, want nothing and you will have everything.avatar Meher Baba. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lee, I really enjoyed reading your poem. Thank you for sharing with us. Hugs, Ethel |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
sometimes ya gotta hit man with a 2 x 4 to get their attention i saw it approach, this humble merit defending me and my weakness manners expecting me along with a forsaken other, that i seemed to misplace it was a fine family reunion~ ~*~ Ummmm.... check your mail! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
sounds like a moment of clarity very evident in much of your work |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
ummmm, I sense that this reunion was much other than a fine one... I am in awe at the way you arrange your words, expressive, but not excessive...You make the English language a proud language, with just the right arrangement of it to let me almost figure you completely out and then... Wham! I am lost in a sentence,or a line, then I backtrack, and find my way again, think I am on the right path...but am not completely sure all the time... But I always have a interesting journey, this time was no exception.. -----------ice/ford ><> |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Your poetry came highly recommended, and now I know why! WOW, I am impressed by your talent! Patricia |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"sometimes ya gotta hit man with a 2 x 4 to get their attention i saw it approach, this humble merit defending me and my weakness manners expecting me along with a forsaken other, that i seemed to misplace it was a fine family reunion~" Excellent write Lee!!! Much enjoyed as always! hugs~Nancy Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that. |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
sometimes ya gotta hit man with a 2 x 4 to get their attention i saw it approach, this humble merit defending me and my weakness manners expecting me along with a forsaken other, that i seemed to misplace it was a fine family reunion~ Hey would O love to hit a few men with a 2x 4 , what a wonderful impact LOL Hope |
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