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OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

0 posted 2006-01-04 12:04 PM

S.A.S. Pietermaritzburg
19 December 2005

Through eery, waterway corridors
and quiet cabins
the lion fish
hunts his prey
in the murky, silent,
coralled depths,
oblivious to
the voices
that echoed there
once.

- Owl

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2006-01-04 12:23 PM

I love your poetry style, dear Owl.

This is another example showing your great talent.

Love,
Margherita

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

2 posted 2006-01-04 02:01 PM

excellent write, many, many voices lost to the deep

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

3 posted 2006-01-04 03:54 PM

oblivious to
the voices
that echoed there
once.
Exellent!!!

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

4 posted 2006-01-04 05:29 PM

Now you know I had to go searching . . .

and D-Day . . .
Man, what a dive that would be.

I don't know if I could do it.

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

5 posted 2006-01-04 07:20 PM

Through eery, waterway corridors
and quiet cabins
the lion fish
hunts his prey

in the murky, silent,
coralled depths,
oblivious

to voices
that echoed there
once.

....................................

Good, yet use the poetry of a pause;
allow for the telling space, silence . . .

John

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

6 posted 2006-01-04 07:48 PM

Thank you Margherita, Aenimal, Dominique-Simone, littlewing and Edward Grim.

Do you do deep-sea diving, littlewing?

Yes, John, the silence speaks the deepest, doesn't it? But, you are the master of that.

- Owl

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2006-01-04 07:52 PM

Good poem,
wonderful responses,

a thoughtful critique...

what more could a reader wish?

Oh yes.

More, please.

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

8 posted 2006-01-04 08:36 PM

Smiles and thanks, Sunshine.

- Owl

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

9 posted 2006-01-04 09:46 PM

No, I wish I did . . . was in Hawaii for that but nothing major . . . used to dive down to the bottoms of all the Lakes here too.

THAT was creepy . . .

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

10 posted 2006-01-06 06:33 PM

Littlewing, to me, that's major! I'd love to, but I have an inexplicable fear of putting my face below water.

- Owl

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