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Drum Circle |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever 
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The world was a place of broken men, a burden for the heart The sun sat high in the gypsy sky until it would depart and the sea wore a road of sunlight, below the orange clouds As I stood there just watching- Watching-watching I stood on the store just watching, as day gave in to night. A full moon of November, the camp smoke filled the air with essence of sage and cedar, there were flowers in our hair We drink to the ancient spirits, the sea reflects the moon While many a drum was beating, Beating- beating Full circle the drums were beating, I felt a sudden breeze. This forgotten world of broken men this night was left behind, The wind grew strong, the beats went on, forever in my mind Our shadows were a-flicker, from bonfire ten feet high On that night we were dancing Dancing-dancing For one night we were dancing, And howling at the moon. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Absolutely one of your best, and darn it is good to see your words here today. Very, very well done, enjoyed this immensely! |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
A full moon of November, the camp smoke filled the air with essence of sage and cedar, there were flowers in my hair We drink to the ancient spirits, the sea reflects the moon While many a drum was beating, Beating- beating Full circle the drums were beating, I felt a sudden breeze. This is an awesome write. I can see the scene in my mind. Good to read your words again. hugs, Chris |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Love the beat of this...how it reads in time to the theme...I have been in this place dancing before...only the wind was music played, blowing through reed-flutes along the frozen shore..I was ice fishing at night..It was the "broken men" who blew the song.. and though I did not dance, and my fire came from a cloeman lantern, I too howled at the moon.. Love this poem.... -----------ice ><> |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
This is an excellent poem. I am usually not a fan for poems that have a rhyming nature but this was great... Good work |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
...SAVED faster than you can say, "Perfection!" My goodness, I haven't read your words for some time and now you presented this poetic feast! I do believe this may be my absolute favourite of yours that I have read. Bravo! ~ the cadence, the visuals, ~ the everything! ~ "Perfection!" Giving you a great big hug for this very fine piece of writing! EA |
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