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crimson tear Member
since 2003-06-07
Posts 76Massachusetts 
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Ok this is another song that i have yet to put to music. I'm tired of being who you want me to be at the price of who i am you rip out the soul in me while pretending you give a damn I'm sick of this perfection you always ask of me i've bled all that i have to give but you want something i can never be I've killed myself inside all for you forsaken my dreams again all for you i've cried my last tears to try and drown this pain my mind feels like it's drowning and i don't know how to swim i try to keep my head above but you push me under again So i'll breathe in deep all of my hate contempt for all you are you don't know me so don't even try i've already slipped to far whisper in my ear tell me i'm wrong when you've been the one screwing me all along i'm breaking out i'm leaving here i'm through with you i'm through with fear I'm turning a new leaf starting my life again and this time around myself is all i need |
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sim0riah Member
since 2004-09-07
Posts 253Wyoming USA |
Man I dunno if I would want to hear this in a song although music is for many moods..I do think it is well written.. |
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Bodger Senior Member
since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260Tolerance for a short time |
Only problem is that you are too talented to write songs People want just what they can sing too, payola as well You are writing poetry, but with a lot of talent Bodger |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing ...James |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
This song played itself. Excellent tempo, talented write. TD |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
oft times when I think of regret, this is the only regret I've had....wishing people would allow and understand, we all need to be who we are...who we want to be...and where we need to go. I've spent so much of my life, trying to please others...as I believe a lot of people do...and now realize, if they love you less for not being who you are, then they'll never understand, it's not fair to try and control another's life, personality. We all possess needs to change within...but those changes can only come from within ourselves and the want of it for a better life...no one can force it on us...and if they try...and we allow them to do so, in the end, it will only sever closeness and great admiration. Sorry for the soap box, it's my emotional mood this morn...  A great depiction of what not to do...never ever compromise identity. Hugs to you |
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