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Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2005-09-15 07:29 AM

it would be nice to look at your eyes
sitting perhaps under a tree
where the little boys whisper
from behind bushes

I remember the sun at the winery
and the expression on your face
when my hand touched yours
and you said the nervous went away

I wanted to take you on a tour
private showing with our own video
I stood behind you at the car door
and we read each other's minds

why are motel rooms up so high
when you want convenience to be
just off the beaten path
so you don't have to waste time

with the consequences of contemplation

___________
dark

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2005-09-15 07:53 AM

it would be nice to look at your eyes
sitting perhaps under a tree
where the little boys whisper
from behind bushes

sweeeet Dark.
and you wrap it up just soooo
perfectly with that ending!

Left me with a big smile ya did.

live for today,
dream of the future,
and learn eternal truths from the past..

Obsidian Snow
Member

since 2005-08-24

Posts 88

2 posted 2005-09-15 10:33 AM

I really liked this..

took me back to a time when things were so different, in the world and in my world.

Those things you talk about are so missed.

Enjoyed.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2005-09-15 11:14 AM

"I remember the sun at the winery
and the expression on your face
when my hand touched yours
and you said the nervous went away"

DS....Sometimes all it takes is a touch of hand!

Startime55
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since 2003-04-05

Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada

4 posted 2005-09-15 11:59 AM

This poem brings memories of sweet romance...Absolutely beautiful...**big hugs**

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2005-09-15 02:49 PM

DarkStranger~

'why are motel rooms up so high
when you want convenience to be
just off the beaten path
so you don't have to waste time

with the consequences of contemplation'

Hmmm, well perhaps sometimes longer contemplation would be the wiser path to take ?

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

6 posted 2005-09-16 02:14 AM

I remember the sun at the winery
and the expression on your face

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

You set the mood so well, some where behind a sinking sun.

As always, your poetry is ripe for the pickin', Dark Stranger~

Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

7 posted 2005-09-16 03:27 AM

love it. period.

Angelheart
Senior Member

since 2005-09-08

Posts 754
Jacksonville,FL USA

8 posted 2005-09-16 08:13 AM

----Dark Stranger----
This is so well said and wonderful feelings in it too!!! Thanks for sharing this....

Poetry can get you very far
-Laura

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