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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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I Hear I hear the howling of the wind A fouling never to exscind It whispers in the soul of me That lives in serendipity I see the sky and greenery The lovely, lovely scenery It drops a salve within my eye But does not stop the tears I cry I feel the rain upon my skin Rising welts upon it’s thin Washing down the dust of grime But does not stop the passing time I smell the odors decompose The odor started like a rose It lifted me to heavens goal And handed me my pass of soul But still I cannot understand The rhythm of the marching band |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Hehe, the last line made me chuckle a little. I love the meter in this, so it makes it hard to believe that you wouldnt' get the rhythym in music  But this was so lovely.. the beauty of life and nature, and yet the fleetingness (is that a word? :P) of it. Very good! Love's a lovely lad His bringing up is beauty Who loves him not is mad For I must pay him duty -Anonymous |
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Bodger Senior Member
since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260Tolerance for a short time |
The Salvation Army If this is it Does terrific work Chubb I believe sponsors "all is gone and you had better believe it, because we will be back here next week" merchants who weakly and weekly test your "doorlocks" I like the words, maybe a bit harsh Bodger |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy There are so many oposing emotions and feelings in this. I like that in a poem...but this: "But still I cannot understand The rhythm of the marching band", just isn't true. You understand rhythm like no other!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
LoveBug Thank you for the read and reply Bodger It's really a subjective thing, thank you. Martie, Not as much as I'd like to.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Oh Sy... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
passing, Thank you sweet.  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hi, T-Man! My soul lives in serendipity as well! I suppose you could say that we're kindred spirits of sorts!  Beautifully written, my friend! Loveya! Linda |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Earth Angel Thank you dear |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Oh yes, you understand Nothing stops time, except your poetry Love Liz |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
The things you hear and see are truly reflected in your poetry Sy. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Well Sy, seeing that Martie is a woman I'm going to side with her. Besides she's right even though you're write.  How I do enjoy the flow of your pen and your mind. Peace.If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Would that only be true. scorpio Thank you my friend. Larry, I was leaning more tward the final rhythem. LOL Thank you Larry. |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
no words can express how i feel right now so i shall just My spirit will rise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
MGROVES That's good enough for me. |
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