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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
A stranger touching too close With rambling of a restless mind, Yet in a time when he chose He became soft gentle and kind, But it was just a brief stay Before the nightmare took hold And by the dawn the next day His spirit was distant and cold. Cold she be another wine One so sweet and delighting, The vintage he wished to find In a bottle ever flowing. There is no taste left on his lips No remembrance at his fingertips; A brushed cheek at departure And roads diverged to the future. Gloom |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Prof, You in some kind of funk?  Interesting write.If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thanks Larry, Funk? Not sure if that applies, Certainly a darkish mood, a haze on the verge of depression, But then so often I am on that verge And in that haze. Glad you took the time to read and respond. Gloom |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
fits my mood...like a sour note drifting in that proverbial bottle seen floating in a stormy sea |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Hey Prof, Just trying to figure out the mind set of these writes. Truth is it's none of my business. After all, what ever you write is done well and this one really intrigued me.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Than you, Midnitesun, A sour note? You must have heard me singing. But there are enough stormy seas these days. Pleased you enjoyed my words. Larry, Truth is you are a concerned friend. This actually is inspired by past events, Mine filled with memories and regrets, But that’s always the way it is with me. Gloom |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I know that haze chin up Gloom...tomorrow's another day |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Perhaps a bit dark but very well written. A walk in the light might brighten things up a bit. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I don't believe how some don't care, how they scar others...and the effects their cruel and unthinking actions have...they just don't have a clue, therefore, are incapable of love...so in the end, we're better for it...yanno? this was bittersweet and yet, very well done. [This message has been edited by LeeJ (08-31-2005 10:04 AM).] |
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