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Open Poetry #35

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Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

0 posted 2005-03-08 08:57 PM

Illuminated corners
of your soul
reveal your duality

To the world
demanding respect
backed with power
so potent
it's aroma is arousing

protecting what few see
even you seldom visit

gazing in your pools
drowning in you
there you were
exposed
with our figers entwined
etwined, mirroring our
thoughts, feelings and desire

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

1 posted 2005-03-08 11:12 PM

Speaking of potent -- you are strong indeed. This is really good. It's hard to catch this intimacy in a way that lets the reader feel it, and you have.

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Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

2 posted 2005-03-08 11:14 PM

I agree with Ratleader's comments.
Very well done. Chris

"Nunc scio quit sit amor."
~ Virgil

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

3 posted 2005-03-09 10:28 AM

Thank You both so very much.....

~~ Connie ~~

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