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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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i shiver the movement of kisses the gallop of king’s horses that take you away in dream something beautiful gone, into the white of day and your eyes beat round me like the sea blue and falling like summer and autumn will shorten the days circle me with new stars and dark leaves she’ll hush the trees and you, will clasp the sun in the pale day with pale hands and arms that are like heaven.... and i can’t touch you and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you ~Buckingham/Nicks |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Beautiful writing, I really enjoyed the read  Andrew |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
OH MY GOODNESS! You are so very talented at using words perfectly. YOur title, very well suited sadie |
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Alicia Member
since 2002-03-22
Posts 279 |
see, what did i tell you?... you are lovely with this language. you are a gift m. -your words are poetry. purely. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
so beautiful a write, Maree  and thanksM |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and your eyes beat round me like the sea blue and falling like summer and autumn will shorten the days circle me with new stars and dark leaves she’ll hush the trees and you, will clasp the sun in the pale day with pale hands and arms that are like heaven.... and i can’t touch you =============================== oh damn............ oh girlie... you rock...this poem rocks.. Im yelling IWIHWT!!! awesome writing Maree... very very cool imagery and personification... I love when I poem does this to me... as KA says... gleeeeeeeee  keeping this one. one drop, an ocean ... one seed, the forest ... one leaf, the wind ... |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
OMG! What an excellent write! Billy 8) |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Awesome Maree !! hugs, Chris "Nunc scio quit sit amor." |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree Your title conflicts with the sensual feeling of this poem...perhaps you meant, Inside and outside? Beautifully done! |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
"she’ll hush the trees and you, will clasp the sun in the pale day with pale hands and arms that are like heaven...." the entire poem is stunning, absolutely breathtaking im keeping this |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
~ outside the flesh but inside the heart and soul. "i shiver the movement of kisses the gallop of king’s horses that take you away in dream" Exquisite! Love & Light, EA |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Maree, I saw that swirling mass that beat around you and the ending . . . is heartbreaking. beautiful. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
What can I say, you're all way too kind and I appreciate you all so very much. I thank you dearly. Though... the lady this poem was written for certainly deserves so much better than this small offering. Martie? actually I meant "outside the flesh" meaning all that's happening around me, but perhaps you're right. Do yuo have a suggestion?  great big to you allthank you Mxx and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you ~Buckingham/Nicks |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
hmm, i like the title...sometimes the flesh is too small to hold the massive feelings we have. Flesh fades.... "outside the flesh" is a much bigger space to contain a whirlwind of emotion. though, plenty of sensuality here |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
damn Maree, this left me speechless. Perfect m'dear.......just perfect writing. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and your eyes beat round me like the sea blue and falling like summer and autumn will shorten the days circle me with new stars and dark leaves she’ll hush the trees and you, will clasp the sun in the pale day with pale hands and arms that are like heaven.... and i can’t touch you ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ had to come back and take this one's beauty in again... reading poems like this makes me remember the REAL reason for writing. lovely high inspire poetess Maree one drop, an ocean ... one seed, the forest ... one leaf, the wind ... |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
we've discussed it already, but i wanted to bring this back up and tell you how much i enjoyed it all over again. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I like the way this falls down the page easy, and pure, a simple escape into an uneasy dream... |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
it is a gift to read you... hugs |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
breathless after this. almost had me crying. Stunning, and too many lines to quote, but i will; and you, will clasp the sun in the pale day with pale hands and arms that are like heaven wowwowwow.library, without a doubt. Hope you are well, miss talking to you! xx |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
glad I didn't miss this.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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