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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
“It came in his day That he saw the soul of her to be the same As any who had lived their life in piety though she had sold her body to the merchants for a few pieces of silver and entertained for those others she owed who selected yet others for her to amuse while she was being used Her own eyes looked first to him With suspicion born of men Who had stroked first her hair Then pried there way between the thighs She now kept covered as if chaste But beheld in his voice something more” Lord! I raise my voce in anger That this the way of misuse you allow And I am left here to see the way spirits are broken To gain use of some flesh that let base man Gain his pleasure I have seen her When for the debts she owed She was forced to offer that which women Gift to the man they love Destroying the meaning of that union You… You Lord designed from the rib of Adam How can I turn my eyes to you And praise the wisdom of your ways Speak of the love you have for us How lord…. How? My soul is torn asunder the lessons That from your mouth to pen Made law Then denied of protection For the lambs you swore to tend There is no faith in me And the wisdom of proverbs escape me That you turn this cold eye to those Who have done thee no harm Nor have the staff to fend off the beast That might ravage once innocence Your son Lord Saw In the lady Magdalene The soul I see You ignore I cast my words as if stone to smite you Though my arm far weaker than yours And turn this day my back No more…lord….. No more “When she was told that they had taken him her flesh ached with the agony she knew in store and fell hard to her knees asking he be spared but her voice fell to deaf ears and she wondered of his touch and what it meant to her soul” “No More, she cried.” “no more “ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat, Excellent write and the echoes bounce within the abyss. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Wow-- this is one tough poem! Easy on the eye, clear and succinct like all of yours....and with an extra helping of backbone. Excellent work! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
My soul is torn asunder the lessons That from your mouth to pen Made law Then denied of protection For the lambs you swore to tend I wonder too sometimes~~ love the depth of thought...and you...where have you been keeping yourself. Always a pleasure to get into a bit of your mind hugs M |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
*sigh* Did it not all begin in the garden of eden? ~tier |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron This is an amazing portrait!  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, what Ed said... clearly, some excellent backbone. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thanks to you all... for the eyes..and the nice words.. part of a series I have been playing with..on lamentations... and will probably never finsih..lol.. your kindness...is always appreciated..and the nice words..I am sure more than the offering deserves... thank you |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
An exception write and read. What's past is prologue. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
This has touched me deep - echoing considerations and wonderings - if only we knew and understood - You've written this so very well - it is most powerful - Susan If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
the ache is raw all through this.... powerful! hugssss Sir nice to see you ~~*~~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I read and wish I could do more... If I could, I would cook your thoughts up in a spoon and take you intravaneously.  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 love this inhaling your exhaust...a breath of fresh air, you are |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
outstanding! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Ron, I see you are still at it ... and better than ever! Write on, my friend. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
its been awhile since ive read you, and this feels different then what i last saw...but ive still enjoyed it and very much look foward to more.  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
pleased to read you again sir, this is another fine offering. |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
:::: quelling the wings:::: **babyblu |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
no words. just a thank you. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
compassionate and sorely felt.... Well done! |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
an excellent thought provocative poem; enjoyed, as always miscellanea |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW!, I've certainly missed reading you Sir Mxx and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ron, this far surpasses anything I have read in a very long time and I wrote once of the Pieta, and this reminded me of that but rarely does anyone write of the other Mary. It also reminded me of my own failures and weaknesses and I thank you for reminding me of both. Sometimes we cannot even see ourselves, sometimes it takes another one's sight And there has been many a darkened eve when I wondered exactly who I was lamenting to. This has reached me far beyond what you will ever realize. |
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Opoetry4me Member
since 2002-10-11
Posts 126Dixon, Ky USA |
Taken back by this one... WOW, Excellent write! |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
After reading this, I-for some reason- find it difficult to put my own words down, knowing I can never compete. This write, Sir, if definately one of, if not the best, that I have seen on these pages yet. In the wooden chair |
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