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Seducing Rain 1:1
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Seducing Rain 1:1 She came on long legs Reaching first the black bottoms of cloud Then stretching to the fat curve of earth Where beyond the straight line of vision All things were hidden but the sounds Distant rumbles of brilliance begotten In the abyss of ions gathered along High humid mass In her roiled the dust Blown wayward from rich planting fields Having grown the seed and fed roots grown deep A mother’s sleep of dreams disturbed When the only moisture found was coaxed From deep within the body of veins Tapped now again and drawn without a circled fall Even the beds of streams used to bleed But now lie the fallow crawl of summers yet to reign Lost this way again Against the skin of cirrus her Too high for rain She inhaled the remains To rare cold flaying march Climbs embryo rain Upon shimmering waves That danced wet mirages on vistas grand Leaving many to hope they too might taste of her Still she strides the land of hide and seek With illusions that no one sees Until she decides to billow the skirts with magic And flash blinding eyes against tragic race Once upon the bend of earth Twice to touch the blue with black And on again And on again Till gone from view And I turned restlessly in my bed Thinking of how it was with you Leaving dreams to speak along sunburned hills Of how it was to drink from clouds With more than passing thirst |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
::quenches the parched throat::: lovely as ever...and yes, one of my fav's...of yours~ **fierce love** **baby** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
a slow storm's a coming they say and the sky screams "lies"... it's hot out there and I love my room. You write such sad beauty Cap.  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
In her roiled the dust Blown wayward from rich planting fields Having grown the seed and fed roots grown deep A mother’s sleep of dreams disturbed When the only moisture found was coaxed From deep within the body of veins Tapped now again and drawn without a circled fall Even the beds of streams used to bleed But now lie the fallow crawl of summers yet to reign Lost this way again Against the skin of cirrus her Too high for rain She inhaled the remains To rare cold flaying march Climbs embryo rain Upon shimmering waves That danced wet mirages on vistas grand Leaving many to hope they too might taste of her Still she strides the land of hide and seek With illusions that no one sees Until she decides to billow the skirts with magic And flash blinding eyes against tragic race Once upon the bend of earth Twice to touch the blue with black And on again And on again Till gone from view ~*~ Indeed, from a distance, she is indeed the seducer... I have seen her from the hills of the plains... and your pen has skirted her, with justice, peeking. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Till gone from view And I turned restlessly in my bed Thinking of how it was with you Leaving dreams to speak along sunburned hills Of how it was to drink from clouds With more than passing thirst ~ ... I keep a fragrance bottle my |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
stunning write  |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
speechless... ~tier |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
dido. SG |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ah... thank you all..for the kindness..of the replies and the words in them... it is a kindness that is appreciated.. thank you one and all.. |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
simply beautiful m'friend |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
How I love the rain...and more I love it when there is a storm filled with passion and power that cannot be equaled...reading your words fills the skies of my world with vision of life giving rain...I love the readings you have shared they are wonderful...*hugs* |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...  ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron Your title seduced me into reading, and the whole poem, well lets just say, it was good for me!  |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Ok I am hooked....reading more... I agree your words are very seductive~ ~ARH "Life is not measured by the number of breaths we take - but by the moments that take our breath away." |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"And I turned restlessly in my bed Thinking of how it was with you Leaving dreams to speak along sunburned hills Of how it was to drink from clouds With more than passing thirst" The ending lines always grab me...as you intend....and I love it. you quench my thirst.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I understand....so very well. This is a beautiful thing, Ron....and beautifully written. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Oh my, I do like this one. Billowed skirts-what a great image. It's full of images for me, and sense-bytes. That's the kind of poetry I like! Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Vivid imagery!! Powerful writing Ron. believe in what your heart feels... |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
...wow... I'm glad these got bumped! How did I miss these?! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ok, Ron, there are no words for this one, because it burned. It beautifully, passionately, hopelessly, perfectly . . . burned. |
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