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James_A_Fraser
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since 2003-09-03

Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines

0 posted 2005-05-06 06:38 PM

Duet, with.....

One tiny amulet, one lock of hair
still touched with the scent
through all this time,
One feather, blue, some poems too;
many, then less, then few.

      If I....

A treasured place, a flower tree
seen once and then dreamed
through all this time,
moments of gold that made us new;
many, then less, then few.

     If you....

Are there love tokens yet to be found,
our spirits together
through all this time?
And times apart we’ll remember too;
many, then less, then few?

     When we....

     ~~o~~

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2005-05-06 06:58 PM

I had to read this twice...an awesome piece!

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2005-05-06 10:11 PM

Jamie...this is so touching! Made me sniff!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

3 posted 2005-05-09 05:10 PM

I've known for a while that you were the best duet partner imaginable... Now you go and prove for all to see how thoroughly you carry any duet. *G*

For though you've left spaces, they're not empty... your verses are powerful enough those missing lines whisper in our ear... superb!

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

4 posted 2005-05-10 09:50 AM

Oh yes, the pauses are intoxicating here JF...superb write.
TD

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2005-05-10 09:52 AM

James, this brought to mind
a lovely garden I visited
a few months ago...

and like the pictures I took then,
this is perfect...

and a pleasure.

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

6 posted 2005-05-10 09:53 AM

Well done James.

believe in what your heart feels...

James_A_Fraser
Senior Member

since 2003-09-03

Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines

7 posted 2005-05-10 10:40 AM

No, sunny lady~~ I do appreciate your feeling so, but it's not perfect, no, not at all. But that's how it is with such things, seems there's always one too few, or one too many~~ and sometimes it's hard to tell which.

~~J

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