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The Blue of Dusk
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The Blue of Dusk |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Be still and hear the wind enter the orchards here where dead memories sink into earth of no gardens, just cold dirt trees and walls just images now long after the storms of March have passed by you left me playing with the stars always looking up in wonder-- looking down for another day 'pressed to edges, pressed to stone' where warmth once laid my fingers have the need of touch he understands the connection I prefer his laugh in fragments of day he captivates me like rain disappearing into the blue of dusk Sometimes I find myself thinking of him -- he crawls inside it feel effortless as though he has always been there and when my heart is full of pain the rain will tap the glass and reflection and I will await such a reply: I lit my cigarette you waved and entered the darkness a single petal in search of life tomorrow I will arise early to meet you there ~~*~~ I'm Standing on a bridge I'm waitin in the dark I thought that you'd be here by now Theres nothing but the rain ~~**~~ |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Gorgeous. I loved this read. I was touched...I know that I say this often...however when my heart is moved, it searches for words that oft times are not there...this is one of those occasions. I truly loved this poem. I hope to read more of your work. Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent. |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
And I'll know it's you with the greeneyes! enjoyed bernie  A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Sometimes I find myself thinking of him -- he crawls inside it feel effortless as though he has always been there and when my heart is full of pain the rain will tap the glass and reflection and I will await such a reply:" oh yesss.... fantastic!!  |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Oh wow...!!!!! Eric |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
~and when my heart is full of pain the rain will tap the glass and reflection and I will await such a reply:~ and I echoed the WOW. Charisma |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
YES!! YES!! YES!! B E A U T I F U L !! So very much enjoyed. Hugs to you pretty lady~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what would we do if you didn't write dang, this is awesome! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
finally, don't go so long between writes, the withdrawal symptoms kick in |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
you already knew this would reach right in and grab me my dear sister... this is beautiful... you are beautiful...   God L~ I have missed you soooo I really want to care, |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Be still and hear the wind enter the orchards You had me there, and then this Sometimes I find myself thinking of him -- he crawls inside it feel effortless as though he has always been there Gwad Lady, thats so so relavent and well said!! Awesome, simply awesome! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Lauren, this is absolutely enchanting, sweet friend, you instantly had me daydreaming of the sound of winds between the orchards because my mother loves orchards like I do and she collects them and she has a whole corner of the house where there's plenty of sun dedicated to them! (does happy dance) You always weave emotions and nature so beautifully together, yay, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "If we have no peace, it is because we have forgotten that we belong to each other" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
It's been awhile since I have been able to read some poetry here! You are one of the ones I missed sooo much. I always love your beautiful writing. -Tara |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ This is simply breathtaking ...~ Nice to see your lovely poetic thoughts~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Aleta Member
since 2005-04-17
Posts 102Louisiana |
I feel as though your teardrop of thoughts somehow seeped through to my own… the way you flow your words, the reader is swept up into your emotions. Enjoyed the write.. |
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