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UniqueFreak
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since 2004-01-09

Posts 62
Scotland

0 posted 2005-04-10 06:14 PM

Hey people...not posted in a while! hope all is well! i must warn again that im not good at the technical side of things...instead i just type whatever comes into my head! feedback would be great!!....

As I sit and scribble now meaningless
words on a coffee stained page,
I dream of the day they’ll be brought to life,
sung live on the stage.

But I can only create a colourless,
Picture of simple life tales,
Painting a wilful and wondering world,
In body and in Braille

For you cannot see, my true hue’s
or insipid strength that I contrive.
Still I hope, wish and dream,
My words, to you, are alive.

if you go ,where I have been
If you see and touch my past
you will sing of pain and sorrow
and not of obstacles I’ve surpassed.

But if you take this poem I give,
And its face value you shall rate,
My story, my view, my message to you,
Will unduly but truly abate.

They say true blues can only – come from
Adversity and hard times,
But they say that those who fight on and on
Are shown the silver line.

My words on this page are,
Simply a window to my heart
You can see what you wish
It’s the majesty of art.

But close your eyes and you will come,
To realise what you desire,
Not from my words, nor my view,
But from your eternal fire.

As I sit and scribble now meaningful words,
On an even more coffee stained page,
I dream of the day they’ll be brought back to life,
In another time and age.

Stephi x

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

1 posted 2005-04-10 06:24 PM

Stephi

Welcome back...I could really relate to your poem...as I'm sure many others will.

"My words on this page are,
Simply a window to my heart
You can see what you wish
It’s the majesty of art."

Indeed! wonderfully said!

PS...What an adorable baby!

Copperbell
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since 2003-11-08

Posts 956

2 posted 2005-04-11 03:29 PM

I enjoyed this -

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

3 posted 2005-04-11 08:46 PM

Very nicely penned!  Perhaps I should use coffee stained paper!  Enjoyed...

          miscellanea

Juju
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since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

4 posted 2005-04-11 08:49 PM

I liked this. don't worry. when it comes to [poetry, free style is just one way to place words one the paper lol.

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

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Between the Lines

5 posted 2005-04-11 11:19 PM

well I loved this...the meaning behind the words and the patterned rhyme

M

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

6 posted 2005-04-12 08:54 AM

My words on this page are,
Simply a window to my heart
You can see what you wish
It’s the majesty of art.

~*~

I can only ditto Martie...
on all aspects, and especially
the lovely baby.

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

7 posted 2005-04-12 04:54 PM

enjoyed

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

8 posted 2005-04-12 06:13 PM

very well written

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

9 posted 2005-04-12 07:36 PM

what a heart beat write! I enjoyed every line of this.

EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

10 posted 2005-04-12 08:51 PM

Reader to a Poet...loved it!

UniqueFreak
Member

since 2004-01-09

Posts 62
Scotland

11 posted 2005-04-13 02:36 PM

thank you guys! really appreciated! didnt think it would get such good views!

the baby is my bro...he is much older now. u can see him here http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v384/Endless-Place/ELvis.jpg

thanks again!

Stephi x

UniqueFreak
Member

since 2004-01-09

Posts 62
Scotland

12 posted 2005-04-13 02:40 PM

thank you guys! really appreciated! didnt think it would get such good views!

the baby is my bro...he is much older now. u can see him here http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v384/Endless-Place/ELvis.jpg

thanks again!

Stephi x

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