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Shades of grace
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Shades of grace |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
The recollection of my eyes stroking her, hypnotically ease fills to flowing and over, time slows to shades of grace and serenity. With devoted breath I draw in the elusive perfume of her company. For the night... a moment into morning, while desire still surpasses need, I lie within her favor and declare “I am complete”. Tomorrow, I will ache and speculate precisely why, supposing a bit of this, some of that, and certainly... the absence of the answer to all that ailed me. Thumb absently circling index finger, I dare recall peeling the tin foil dress from the promise of her light brown skin and all I needed to be fine again. ‘It was a short affair’ I think, recognizing my arrogance in declaring her end so casually. But I am bold in my morning confidence, falsely secured by the sweet steaming coffee and skunk scented smoke. ‘Spring’ I say aloud ‘Things will be alright in spring’. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Duncan I've had those feelings, well done. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, "skunk scented" ...anything that has that much scent???? buyer beware LOL, you have been missed especially your scent LOL see? you even have Sy sighing LOL |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Spring has sprung, Pup... Welcome back to the porch! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
  so very glad you posted this. It goes beyond beautiful and sorrowful.  if it weren't for you I would be a lonely girl. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
'Bout time you got back on that porch! This is exquisite!!! Excellent write..I do hope you will gift us with an encore. Hugs~N. For it was not into my ear you whispered |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
From title through last word... I enjoyed. *S* |
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saved_by_grace Member
since 2005-01-08
Posts 332In the arms of God... |
This was beautiful, Duncan!  ~ Becka |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
quote:ain't that the truth, brother. egowhores.com - really love yourself. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 because you already know  (and this is the second time you have displayed amazing synchronicity on this'n) yer lovely my friend |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and OH you owe me an e mail yanno! tsk...  |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Duncan has email?!?!  egowhores.com - really love yourself. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
yeah... Dunc HAS email... Dunc just forgot how to REPLY to them... yayayaya   |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Tomorrow, I will ache and speculate precisely why, supposing a bit of this, some of that, and certainly... the absence of the answer to all that ailed me. Thumb absently circling index finger, I dare recall peeling the tin foil dress from the promise of her light brown skin and all I needed to be fine again. do I detect hints of allits, assonance and rhyme???? quoting KA.... GLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE (of the mothy kind) It's only words and words are all I have to take your heart away. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Just like the song goes, there is that certain someone whom we're always better together with, even when we're in between. And just like the seasons, they don't really change all that much. So there you wrote it, it's along the same lines as the lyrics by Jack Johnson, and it says it all. So says the bluesy one~ It's sweet goob, and she's a lucky gal. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ And our dreams they're made out of real things, like a shoe box of photographs and sepia tone loving. Love is the answer, at least to most of the questions in my heart why are we here, and where do we go, and why is it so hard. It's not always easy and sometimes life can be deceiving, but I'll tell you one thing, it's always better when we're together. The edit queen strikes again, big teeth and all! [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (04-04-2005 12:52 AM).] |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Awesome write. Much enjoyed. Chris "The soul that can speak through the eyes can also kiss with a gaze." |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyoed....James |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
the poem is a good one. "For the night... a moment into morning, while desire still surpasses need, I lie within her favor and declare “I am complete”." this.... could have come from my very own thoughts !! thank you for sharing it !! Snow "i close my eyes and gather up the puddle of this life, one teaspoon at a time, into a bucket with holes" ~me an excerpt from "she still sees ugly" [This message has been edited by Sunshine (04-06-2005 09:07 AM).] |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Thank you all for the great responses. And just for the record, this poem wasn't about a woman. It's about a drug. [This message has been edited by Sunshine (04-06-2005 09:09 AM).] |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
"For the night... a moment into morning, while desire still surpasses need, I lie within her favor and declare “I am complete”." Yes, this is a beautiful sentiment Duncan as is the entire piece. Very well done Duncan. I really want to care, |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
boy, girl, whatever. don't matter, don't care. i likum your poems. egowhores.com - really love yourself. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
ummm...I just liked the poem....  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
In reading this poem again, I truly do understand and relate. But alcohol is my drug of choice. There is just something very sensual and touching about a woman writing about a woman in a loving way, and I had thought that's what this was about. Men write about women like this every day and it just doesn't have the same effect. Other people might not feel the same way. [This message has been edited by Sunshine (04-06-2005 09:10 AM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This reminds me of a story. I once wrote a guy's number on the only paper I could find in my purse. I never did call him. When he finally called me, I had to explain to him that I smoked it.  At least I got SOME pleasure out of him...sheesh.I didn't tell him that though. There's enough pain in the world--no need to add to it, methinks.  Love ya Dunc. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You're so much fun...  |
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