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James_A_Fraser
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since 2003-09-03

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Out Making Anticlines

0 posted 2005-03-25 06:46 PM

On An Ordinary Day

Was it really today?
The clouds don’t even pause.
Looking strangely commonplace,
they send back one gray whisper:

Yes, yes, it really was.

And she was truly so lovely then?
I ask the wanton blue between them.
As it fades into mere sky,
the sibilant silence says:

Yes, yes, just as you saw her.

Our hearts did sing,
I ask the grass for reassurance,
in the same way I recall?
The slender blades all nod:

Oh yes, we hear them yet.

Why must she be gone?
I ask a random dandelion,
why do I walk alone
on this day of all our days?

No answer comes then

as my seed fluff trickles off
along an ordinary breeze
between the normal grass
and these commonplace clouds,
under a merely blue sky.

[This message has been edited by James_A_Fraser (03-26-2005 09:13 AM).]

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

1 posted 2005-03-25 06:54 PM

Why must she be gone?
I ask a random dandelion,
why do I walk alone
on this day of all our days?

No answer comes then

There is so much forlorn ache in this... no day is ordinary when you feel like only half a person... when all that's important is missing. Very powerful write!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2005-03-25 07:18 PM

I felt this

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2005-03-25 09:33 PM

Jamie

There is a landscape within your heart that holds that day still and always....I think she will know that and how special this day is to you.

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2005-03-26 09:04 AM

There are days when a couple's magic
is so great

that no amount of nature's beauty
could compare...

as magical as nature can be.

Bravo, sir, on a poem well felt.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2005-03-26 10:59 AM

Excellent write...I felt this one!!
Thank you for sharing.
Hugs~Nancy

For it was not into my ear you whispered
But into my heart
It was not my lips you kissed
But my soul

DavePage
Member Elite

since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

6 posted 2005-03-28 03:25 PM

Brilliant James

Dave

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