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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2005-02-15 09:35 PM

Slender, the stem of thorned remember,
lying silent upon the weathered hand.
amongst the crushed petals of then.
A mist lying calm upon the cool
sod of earth’s ash.

She arose when dreams awoke
the slumber of a wandering soul,
as clenches pressed firmly the
fluff, appearing but a blink before
the cornerstones swallowed her glancing eyes
and the haunt of her smile
laughed at him.

Sudden stark sweat stole morning’s gasp as
panic beads drenched the bed sheet and a
gust galloped through the open window,
chasing the shadow beneath the door...
into the black of a cat’s eye.

And in the shimmer of that ocular orb, he
saw her...turning slowly away, walking
into the abyss of a memory, desperate to
become a dream....if but only once....
Just once...once more.

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

1 posted 2005-02-15 10:30 PM

Nice poem, Magnus!

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2005-02-16 01:38 PM

oh that ending verse...wow

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

3 posted 2005-02-16 02:35 PM

This really pulls the reader in, Magnus, into its swift pace.

Good stuff.

Corinne

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2005-02-16 05:06 PM

Barry, my very friend....this poem is magic!!

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

5 posted 2005-02-16 08:11 PM

like the mood of this - and the echo of the ending - very nice Barry

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

6 posted 2005-02-17 08:25 AM

A one word comment
....excellent!

This poem really pulled me into itself, love that, when it happens...

________ice
><>

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

7 posted 2005-02-17 08:28 AM

Barry, this is prose at it's finest...thank you for the lovely read

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

8 posted 2005-02-17 08:36 AM

ooohhhh Barry, excellent sir......

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