sighing (Ed's challenge, with a twist)

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Open Poetry #34

sighing (Ed's challenge, with a twist)

Midnitesun

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0 posted 2004-11-11 08:51 PM

Sighing

        sounding out

those breathless moments of life

an exodus of emotion

understood,

no matter the language base,
no matter the faith,

as a hand goes limp,
as touch fades away

heartbeat stilled

hands chilled,

in the final night

of Ramadan.

Some will cry, some will cheer.
And for many
             fear of the unknown
                   is again
breathing down the neck

yet a newborn generation

will go to sleep and dream

of what comes after
the exodus

on the final night.

Ratleader

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1 posted 2004-11-11 09:25 PM

Wow, nice! I like this! Yep, it's a twist, and a good one.

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Midnitesun

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2 posted 2004-11-11 09:34 PM

Glad you liked, Ed. Thanks for the challenge.
I needed to write this POV tonight.

kayjay
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3 posted 2004-11-11 09:47 PM

It is always worth stopping to think when you write something, Kacy. Well done. Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

Midnitesun

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4 posted 2004-11-11 10:01 PM

Thanks, Ken. It seemed ironic somehow, that Arafat died the last day of Ramadan, and on the day we in the US honor veterans.
Whether loved or hated, Yasser definitely impacted millions while alive, and we will have to wait and see what people do in his memory.

Magnus

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5 posted 2004-11-11 10:49 PM

Yes Kacy, we will have to sit and wait and
see what comes of his passing. Sadly, I
fear that death will only bring more of the
same to many innocents.

Midnitesun

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6 posted 2004-11-11 11:04 PM

Now is the time for everyone on both sides to take a deep breath, and look for ways to heal. But sadly, I already see signs that too many are holding onto the same old mindset, the circle of non-stop revenge.
Still, I keep my fingers crossed with hope.

Gentle Spirit
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7 posted 2004-11-12 08:21 AM

yes Kacy, a deep breath is what is needed. Challenge well met!

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

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