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He says, “Not I” [tribute to Cpat] Choka for a Poet
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He says, “Not I” [tribute to Cpat] Choka for a Poet |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Rivers run through lines Landscapes of innuendo Mountain and tree eyes Know a weathered journal’s keep Yet he will admit, “Not I.” |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Wow! So glad I was able to drop in this morning...I am finding superb poetry. The norm for poetry at this site was good when I joined nearly two years ago, but it's improved markedly since then. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
This man, who's muse drifts currents bending and winding poetry flowing through corners of thought and mind Yet, he still does say, "Not I." I'm in...  Thanks Karilea for posting this. Ron, thank you for all of your great poetry!The greatest beauty on earth, is found in the hearts of those who love.... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling) it's always easier to tell the truth... "Not I" you're a kind lady ma'am.... thank you |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Tree eyes glistened from staring too long into the sun as it bounced hard off the skin of lady blue just above the long still hole where old man Johnson's son drowned in the flood of 79 I wondered if they were blind because they couldn't move without the whisper of one to the others "I am here" "I am here" but my own eyes hurt and I was deaf this cold day to the way summer murmered still among the stones and roots lining her bed so I pulled a sheet of white from my old journal and began to write: " It is never in my mind to write or to be the place these words come from they it seems write me and of other places other times" "Not I" the line continued nor anyone can claim the beauty of her here" The currents slow along this long hole and I drifted letting my own glisten of tear dry then folded the torn page and let it float Knowing the words and the Lady blue owned me and it would forever be "Not I" |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mercer felt mercy Blue bends sound his twain to call Paddles trail wet lines There is more to floating days Yet he will whisper, "Not I." |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Seems to me, Ron....that it is "I".... and you are, you do, and....you will! Thank you Sun, for pointing it out so eloquently. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
" It is never in my mind to write or to be the place these words come from they it seems write me and of other places other times" ============================ See what you've inspired?   |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"Not I," he murmurs Liquid slapping dancing light "Yes, you," she whispers "In writing of what is, then, marking time where we will go." |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
This day full of warmth along her curved banks of blue mesmerized in song winds of change speak soft to him yet, he does believe, "Not I." The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Ron ~ A man of passion, With wise and poetic heart, Touching us with grace. Our Captain is at the helm Of PiP's sailing love boat. ~ Yes! YOU!  EA [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (11-11-2004 11:47 AM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
YA'LL are pretty sweet...(chuckling) but belive me... "not i" is a truth... and you're beginning to embarass me... now surely you all can find somethng worthwhile to write about?? hell... tell me stories... but I'm nothing here but a hack..and these words I don't deserve... ((hugs to you all..))) no go play ... lol someplace else perhaps??? (chuckling) |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
The river runs deep we know her as Lady Blue Captain pulls us close Ron you tug at our heart-strings yet you still believe, "Not I". |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Slyly she smiles eyes twinkle in golden sun lips curve in laughter she knows of his denial even yet, he thinks, "Not I." |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"Hush," Lady Blue sighs, "Feel the roll and sway of me Music not all hear ~ I bring shadows, mists and dreams," Now he wonders, "if not I..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
He makes me say "Damn..." And others I can't print here Still he grins, "Not I". |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
What beauty is inspired through this thread -and Ron - I must agree - you write incredibly- elegantly - lovely this, Sunshine - SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Not only is the initial post a worthy tribute but the responses are a treat as well. You even got the moth in on it and Ron turning a bit red. That in itself gives lend to reasons why. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Sunshine, mama! You've weaved golden captain today and look how the tapestry grows! wonderful! ~tier |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I confess, I do not know how to write a choka but I do know that . . . he whispers silent loudspeak deafening my ears with the slightest of snowflake downy sirens screaming to fill what is missing inside *smile* |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
Ron, gentle river muse flowing poetry downstream thoughtful offerings swiftly carried on currents to wed with blue of sea. ...thank you for the gentle journey and yes... "you" |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
just chuckling... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
well now, dontcha just love ALL of these wonderful replies!  beautiful muses coming out to join in...  The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you...yes |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
River streams dancing Leaves falling in light applause "Not I", says he, still. "But you even pen me blue capturing moments, this, true." |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Orchestrated Sound Audience of trees in sway Standing ovation "Brava" blows upon the wind And Lady Blue says, "Yes, You." |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Rivers run through lines Landscapes of innuendo ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Lines full of allusions are sometimes difficult to capture, but oh so captivating to the mind! Wandering eyes are usually eager to read between the lines. Well done! Deb |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
“Not I.” Yep! JL |
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