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Keep Me Promise
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Keep Me Promise |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Keep Me Promise Curled words penned in womanship lines Are as dear to me as anything Tacketta-tacketta’d to keys dancing Across blues grays brownly greening mirrored eyes That stare my own thoughts Back to retinas willing to hold… And yet, even that form shapes a bond And if I missed a comma, never mind Though meaning changes for want of, But I have missed my periods, too And the life they gave back then. Nothing new, she says, nothing new in the way of What, As if a tomorrow would go on without, All the while she feels shallow, Knowing others know depths she hasn’t plunged into, Just yet. Who knows, they say, what tomorrow will bring? Appointments, for some, spaces of drawn out Lingering for others, and most of all, Some regret at choices made, for the very few Who have time to think Of such things. But oh the joy in choices good. Some say, whisper prayer, some plead Think of me; some, even, say nothing at all, Knowing that them that know, know… Keep me promise. For want of a comma keep me promise. ~*~ For those that know Adversity. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea/sissy A poem almost as lovely as you!  |
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myheart Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 160lost in your eyes |
But oh the joy in choices good. Oh yes. My goodness, this is a wonderful write! Sunshine you certainly do "shine." ~myheart~ |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Ah, this is most kind in its offering and beauty - much enjoyed -  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
The punctuation seemed right to me. As did the write. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Some regret at choices made, for the very few Who have time to think Of such things. But oh the joy in choices good. wonderfully express Karilea Mxx into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
Some say, whisper prayer, some plead Think of me; some, even, say nothing at all, Knowing that them that know, know… Keep me promise. For want of a comma keep me promise ******************************** wOw Sunshine....this is an awesome prayer... **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
keep, me promise? hehe, funny how the little round butt dots can change a life or lift the veil of some unknown enjoyed this |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
You do have a way with words. I say hurray for those times of adversity… past. I really enjoy your poetry sunshine!! Perspectives come alive in your words. JL |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"But oh the joy in choices good. Some say, whisper prayer, some plead Think of me; some, even, say nothing at all, Knowing that them that know, know… Keep me promise. For want of a comma keep me promise." Yes...beautiful! Hugs YOU! Now while the leaves still dance on the wind |
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