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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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And yes she has a pretty face A smile to call the morning down Of all her horror there's no trace She wears this mask just like a clown As yes her eyes hold depths of blue To hide corruption lying there Her cheeks and lips of rosy hue Beguile the mind, and heart ensnare And yes her make up is in place Her hair is groomed her voice is calm Look in her eyes; a sparkling grace Be hypnotised, feel no alarm And yes she's smiling just for you Her touch is gentle, soothing, soft She's supple, yielding and so true She'll hold your dreams, take them aloft The pretty face, the smiling eyes Each one complete to draw you in Beneath the surface of disguise A web is formed and you can't win Beneath the guise of pretty face Corruption looms to tear you down And some small lies; a rotten trace Will hold your mind like thistledown He web is great; her time the race With beauty held fast in a jar But all of her wields blackest space So look beyond, she is no star And yes she has a pretty face A smile to call the morning down But there's no beauty and no grace Within her soul, hurt wears the crown Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The pretty face, the smiling eyes Each one complete to draw you in Beneath the surface of disguise A web is formed and you can't win Beneath the guise of pretty face Corruption looms to tear you down And some small lies; a rotten trace Will hold your mind like thistledown Oh, lady... we must know some of the same people! *S* But... warnings do no good... those ensnared are too entranced to care... and we can only watch until the shells of them are tossed aside... and then try to put the pieces back together. Excellent write, my friend... you weave a web with your words... one I gladly enter. *S* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And yes she is a poet of grace ... weaving rhymes of cadenced lace.  Keth-girlie..this was a true treat to read aloud...and its sooooo good to read your rhymes again...you always did write with meter and harmony. Loved the vocab and word play in this as well as the assonance. And yes she has a pretty face A smile to call the morning down But there's no beauty and no grace Within her soul, hurt wears the crown Rock and roll poetry my friend.  Poetry is emotion put into measure. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Well now, look whose ink I found tonight. You do the flow and rhyme (I am addicted to rhyme I believe) thing so very well. Very much enjoyed and a delight to see your name here. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
So easy to read you. Nice! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
It is frightening - this - the lure of evil beneathe the blush of beauty - you wrote it so very well -- SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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cusick Senior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 668 |
Corrupted beauty. You tell it so well. Puts me in mind of Helen of Troy. Maggie |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kethry~ You paint a poetic portraiture like no other can do~ Excellent ... excellent my friend~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
powerful write |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I had no idea you knew my ex-wife, Keth!  The poem does indeed flow smoothly and makes an excellent point relating to books and their covers. I for example, thought mushy was shy!  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I hear music with this, Kethry. It's a very good read! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Deer, you got it wrong. I'm the shy one  although that's mostly because I have permanent foot and mouth diseas, (yanno everytime I open my mouth I put my foot in it). However this was inspired by Mushy.Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Brings one to think of Charlotte's Web.... For this wench would surely ensnare and suck the life from pulsing veins. Well done Keth. Good write. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
"She Who Was The Helmet Maker's Beautiful Wife" |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Absolutely wonderfyl Lynne Love the way this just flowed down the page. Coming up to Sydney in the near future at all? Mxx into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. ~Sarah McLachlan~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
WOW! what a superb write, Kethry! Love the imagery, could see and feel the frown, the false smile, the crowned clown face looking down. "But there's no beauty and no grace Within her soul, hurt wears the crown" |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I, too, was reading Charlotte's Web in this...certainly glad another saw the same... Really enjoyed this my friend... jwesley |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Beloved one, infamy, infamy, you’ve all got it in for me, I’m sorry beloved I couldn’t, truly couldn’t help it. You know this is utterly, utterly perfect, the rhyme the rhythm cannot be surpassed by anyone. she says I inspired it because I am pretty not because I’m like the spider in the heart of the web, no honestly, I am both shy and quiet and emmmm sweet always Truly exquisite writing darling heart, I love it and I’m so glad being TPO is good for something. and forever Mushy    Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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