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INclan
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since 1999-07-20

Posts 1024
Indiana, USA

0 posted 2004-11-04 03:24 PM

Color past it's prime
naked arms whisper my name.
A cold moon for light
as I shuffle through frozen
tears. Without you, I suffer.

SEA

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since 2000-01-18

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with you

1 posted 2004-11-04 05:37 PM

makes me feel so sad...

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

2 posted 2004-11-04 05:39 PM

WOW...you don't post nearly often enough...sad, but lovely none the less

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

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Louisiana

3 posted 2004-11-05 09:13 AM

Yes... I know this. *S*

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

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The World of Poetry

4 posted 2004-11-05 06:33 PM

so short, yet so much emotion.

~Alli~

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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

passing shadows
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displaced

5 posted 2004-11-05 07:59 PM

oh dang...that's heart wrenching

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

6 posted 2004-11-05 08:02 PM

yes...powerfully done!

jwesley

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

7 posted 2004-11-05 08:37 PM

Oh what an ache to this exceptional Tanka!
Well done indeed.
Hugs~

Now while the leaves still dance on the wind
While the moon and the clouds come spinning
Will you whisper my name again?
Again..and again.

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

8 posted 2004-11-05 08:41 PM

I think you speak for many here.

Very much enjoyed.

Maree

into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread.
~Sarah McLachlan~

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

9 posted 2004-11-05 10:02 PM

Chilly in many ways, reality compacted in very few words...good use of the forms intention...
enjoyed...
----------ice
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myheart
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since 2004-11-05

Posts 160
lost in your eyes

10 posted 2004-11-05 11:09 PM

I really enjoy this form of poetry and you have done it perfectly!

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

11 posted 2004-11-06 08:08 AM

K - this is fantastic,
and downright soul chilling.
Very good write here!

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

12 posted 2004-11-06 08:22 AM

InClan~
I hope you know how heart-warming it is for this poetess to see this beauty from you~
Thank you ... thank you for sharing~

I recall that when I first joined these forums (FIVE YEARS AGO TODAY), that I was introduced to this form of poetry from you ... and was spellbound by the beauty that could be presented in such a small space of careful thought~

I've missed your poetry and hope you will *gift* us with more~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

Email noles1@totcon.com

INclan
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since 1999-07-20

Posts 1024
Indiana, USA

13 posted 2004-11-08 05:29 PM

Thank you, all who responded. I am honored that you read and enjoyed my work. Marge, has it been that long? How time flies when one is having fun. Life may stretch me away from all of you, for a time, but I am never really gone.

Best Regards to all....INclan

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