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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2005-01-19 08:53 PM

I was one, the last drop that dripped,
standing alone in the back. Singing
off key to the tune of a funeral march
on a cold November’s day.

Cracks did break Mother’s back and
tweedle dee looked at tweedle dum
in the mirror that had six years of life
left before the crack split a personality
and suddenly...I wasn’t.

Chickens were often born then, in Spring
after the thaw of love’s wish, when a
breath fogged the mirror and a vision
briefly smiled...wondering...

What does a man do when the boy of him
struggles and stumbles still, wrapped in
a cloak of brief maturity and sagacious
thought? When rains fall on the pain of
middle age and the light comes on at
Motel Six, or was it Best Western?

Now...the drips have ceased, the hairline
has won the race and feet miss a crack
on occasion...sprightly dancing over
them, the only dance partner whose
toes don’t hurt...but....in spite of all
that, silk does feel soft to the touch
and words still move....to a two step
in solitaire.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2005-01-19 09:50 PM

You were, indeed. Magnus...
this is one of your best heart offerings,
Ever.

Frame it.

Your kids will thank you.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

2 posted 2005-01-19 10:59 PM

yea
and it's fun while it's happening; never look back

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

3 posted 2005-01-20 12:25 PM

One appropriate comment to this: Wow!

You absolutely captured this one, painful as it is to think about....it's easier to think through words like these.

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Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

4 posted 2005-01-20 01:58 AM

Barry - this is fantastic - aching yet able to laugh - my heart over flows - would give you a big hug right now if I could - you are such a gifted poet -

Hugs

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

5 posted 2005-01-20 08:28 AM

Barry....Good Morning...you know, there is not one line I could highlight...as each and everyone was full of mastery visulizations...Increible read sir...

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

6 posted 2005-01-20 08:59 AM

in Spring
after the thaw of love’s wish, when a
breath fogged the mirror and a vision
briefly smiled...wondering...

lovely writing, Barry and I especially warmed to the last verse

M

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2005-01-24 01:10 PM

Gripping... touching... FANTASTIC!!!!

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

8 posted 2005-01-24 07:28 PM

Enjoyed this!

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

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