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Sunshine
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0 posted 2005-01-18 08:52 PM



Trying to Learn

This spring chick hatched
Summers ago
But actually in winter,
Blooming late as she did

Naivety kept her in fall zone
Much, much too long

But still, she tried to learn
Aspects, theology, idealism
Boundaries

Much, oh too much more

Insights, perspective, ideologies
And love

Math and science she tried to equate
But she roamed and raced
In imagination and time

Mindful of grainy sand falling through
Sunken holes, though
Stopping some with her fingertips

Ever mindful of her warp’d-ness
Casting a fate upon each next footstep ~
A mind fighting with each read,
“You can do it better,”

She wished to lean against the genius
Of her grandfather,
Knowing her line was strained
While mentally training in vain
This wayward,
Late-blooming mind.

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?  Keeping in mind, I must stand close...and keep my promises...

© Copyright 2005 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
SmartChick
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1 posted 2005-01-18 08:58 PM


You are a wonderful poetess, Karilea. I wish I could write like you do.
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2 posted 2005-01-18 08:59 PM


It's good to keep the coals aglow...

smile

I figger, even in death, I'll be learning something new, eh?


RSWells
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3 posted 2005-01-18 09:00 PM


The more I know the less I know I know. You hold yer sand OK. BTW math wasn't my bag for certain.

Poets against the war is redundant

passing shadows
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4 posted 2005-01-18 09:19 PM


lovely write
Midnitesun
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5 posted 2005-01-18 09:24 PM


"Mindful of grainy sand falling through
Sunken holes, though
Stopping some with her fingertips"

Enjoyed the way you captured these grains of thought.

RobertB
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6 posted 2005-01-18 09:42 PM


there seems almost too much to learn
Susan
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7 posted 2005-01-18 10:40 PM


Oh, I know what you mean about the thirst to learn - gads, there is so much I want to know -  enjoyed this - and you are lovely to look at you know, your smile so fits your pen name -

  Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Daniel J D
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8 posted 2005-01-19 02:01 AM


To learn is to gain. Thank you for helping me to learn.

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

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9 posted 2005-01-19 03:38 AM


Sunshine, You write with love and understanding of either yourself or someone other.Enjoyed, marty
Sudhir Iyer
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10 posted 2005-01-19 06:29 PM


Hi Karilea,

Been away for a long while and I just got a flavour of what I have been missing out on. Nice to read you again.

Regards
Sudhir

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11 posted 2005-01-19 06:35 PM


it is a never ending quest for knowledge that keeps us searching and learning.
Even in the smallest ways I find I learn something new every day.
This is splendid writing Kari.  

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

Magnus
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12 posted 2005-01-19 06:46 PM


Are you sure we weren't twins? Sheesh,  the
trials and tribulations of growing up,
aging mentally and becoming sharp as a tack,
in spite of the spring and chicken thing.

BluesSerenade
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13 posted 2005-01-23 03:11 PM


Naivety kept her in fall zone
Much, much too long


Your poetry is a warm ray of hope, and helps me to understand as well as accept the unfolding and the fragile beauty of life.

Wonderful write, Karilea~

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14 posted 2005-01-23 03:37 PM


Love this!

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

Ericc
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15 posted 2005-01-23 04:00 PM


Excellent, excellent write.

Eric

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16 posted 2005-01-23 11:38 PM


Enjoyed...James
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17 posted 2005-01-24 12:11 PM


Thats cool.  Your signature makes me think of my relationship with God.

-GIS

Corruption is caused by holes in obedience to God.

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