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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2004-10-26 08:00 AM

we were hemingway
in some daydream hamlet
where the sun was 3ish
and senoras wore cotton
over heavy heavenly

julio played his guitar
and toe tapped his sandal
you pulled your shawl down
and leaned low to my eyes
the ladies made their own music

you laughed at my uniform
said it was too short
you took it off me
and said it looked good
on the floor by the door

I wrote on your back
with lemon drops
you guessed the words
and said they were poems
then you laughed

and said they were naughty
I wrote on your hip then
with my whispered breath
you said I made you crazy
and it was time for dinner

but could we ride the burros first
_______________

Dark

[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (10-26-2004 10:54 AM).]

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2004-10-26 08:19 AM

I wrote on your back
with lemon drops
you guessed the words
and said they were poems
then you laughed

~*~

those were the good games
held between
guessing, and knowing...

good works here...

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

2 posted 2004-10-26 08:24 AM

we were hemingway
in some daydream hamlet
where the sun was 3ish
and senoras wore cotton

Exceptional opening lines here Mr D,

fantastic all round.

Mxx

and I am haunted
by my illicit exquisite dream
but I can't really wake up
so I just drift in between

~ani difranco~

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

3 posted 2004-10-26 09:14 AM

another scene from the playhouse
in your mind...
I enjoyed being in the front row.

K

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

4 posted 2004-10-26 09:53 AM

Viva le Burro -

This is lovely Dark - I do love your words-

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

5 posted 2004-10-26 11:33 AM

"and said they were naughty
I wrote on your hip then
with my whispered breath
you said I made you crazy
and it was time for dinner"

yes....let's have dinner..

Well done...

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

6 posted 2004-10-26 04:58 PM

and I am haunted
by my illicit exquisite dream
but I can't really wake up
so I just drift in between

~ani difranco~

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

7 posted 2004-10-28 08:09 PM

DS

"but could we ride the burros first"

I didn't know you had burros too....not fast but they do have rhythm, yes?

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JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2004-10-28 08:17 PM

Enjoyed...James

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