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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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She finds fault in the way I tie my shoes The bright ribbons in my hair The sun in my little world My sister’s dog My mother’s meek and humbleness Her innocence Our dollar store tablecloth Rejection continues He approves His anger with himself, infusing justification For his anger with me Becoming the beginning of her story Imagining the hands of his annoyance Are mine…embarrassed of my smile? My car, my poems and sunshine which fills my room Exchanging what is wrong for peace Peace at all cost dies into nothingness Hers becomes his He, I all of us, become her Uncomfortable, walking on egg shells She is infused with unhappiness Anger that I’m certain even she doesn’t understand But there, none-the-less…death slowly hovers He trades all he’s known, giving his entire soul To the clutches of formidable adversary Auctioning off any friend or support Silence laughs, becoming his death sentence She knows nothing of words…she dreams Vogue Diamonds, scarping off make up in her list Of accomplishments… Tying knots in everyone’s voice Satire becomes a published glimpse Looking back at her Rejecting knowledge and happiness for others Her hours grow old, pretending to live Eyes of rain become her sister, her husband Impotent smiles, finding fault with ten years ago Throwing dagger in the bulls eye of tomorrow He lies to himself and watches her unrecognized Dreaming of leaving time and a soul long forgotten He pretends regularity Funny, how much heartache one soul can cause How many lives so negatively touched? In the name of her silence, sticking knives in our world Finding fault under a rock Acting out some tragic soap box thought Catastrophic, the lives she’s squeezed through gauze The pain Heartache Discomfort Suffering Rejection Her lies turn another page, and one after that Archaic novel touching false skies Arranged by choice Pretending to live Pretending to love Acting out some dream, she’s never known My hand turns away, writing another vision Sadly, I step into sunshine Waving, like a sea of softness Which continues to touch shoreline In hopes of brighter days In spite of financial hardships They will need to pay Standing there with my collections of poetry Whispering, “No more obligations” Choosing to loose her hold Choosing life And the college before me…. Looking back to catch whatever it is I can learn Even if I am merely the assistant editor In my very small and unimportant world Yet, a smile becomes sadness |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...and too many, wearing just this very "foundation"... Well done, m'friend. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
holding an ice cube and glancing at the back of your neck...always did perfer you braless ms... but this was nude too..enjoyed it lee j |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Excellent! Down through layers of time seasons, never wondering off subject, never repetitious... Well chosen title, a great metaphorical introduction that mates well with the intensity of the ending.. This is poetry, the kind that satisfies when I am hungry for a poem... _____________ice/ford ><> |
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Soulfisher Member
since 2005-01-07
Posts 226where ever the fly fishing is good |
have to agree with ice on the title kinda pulled me to pop in. so what your sayin in this poem is your sis is a push up and your a push over right. lol very nice write this morning |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Everything that ice that and then some! Excellent write here Lee! Well done!! In the midst of winter, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
LeeJ "Yet, a smile becomes sadness" Good summation, Enjoyed Good morning sweet. |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Awesome writing Lee...simply awesome. Thankyou for this. Chris ~The soul that can speak through the eyes can also kiss with a gaze~ |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Lee J: Life itself is sometimes the bearer of bad news. We must live the best we can with what we are, and sometimes expect nothing in return, even from the ones we love the most. Hurt is bad. But, one can realize love in a type of forgiveness, which can only come from Heaven. From the simplest to the most complicated of reasoning. And, I know, advice is always easier coming from someone who is not in the battle for peace. May God Bless You Lee J. Peace and Happiness your way… JL |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Well, you just wrote life as lived with an alcoholic. Bravo. I lived every line of this. And can truthfully say when you do break away it is with a mix of emotions..and you captured it all...  saving.... "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
I understood every word and it went directly into my brain bypassing thought until it resided in thought. Some much in what I still ended thinking were short words. Dave |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I seriously doubt that many could ever put to pen as much as you have within this poem from deep within. They never will...keep going. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Hi, Lee. Wow, did you say alot. I loved the title, by the way! Missed 'ya. ......jo |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A nice flow of thoughts...James |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Wow.... ~Alli~ Happy 2005! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh Lee |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
You strip away the act to reach reality...this poem is one to be read over and over to catch a look at who people really are....A stunning and powerful poem meant for us all.... |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
That poem reminds me of my sister Katie. She is materialistic, but I love her. She is getting married. I am happy for her. She is a good person inside. Behind the cosmo and covergirl. Juju |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
This makes me think of the sadness of my girlfriend - her brother - his wife - and how she has lost someone she loves because of the selfishness and vile of another, but must walk on despite her sorrow - Well written - very emotive SusanIf I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
This is so heartfelt LeeJ. It brings back bad memories from my own past as a child. You touched me. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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