»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #34
»
My Beijing
| Open Poetry #34 |
|
My Beijing |
|
|
Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
|
Abrasive sand and waves warn. Yet I question just what it is that leads me. Knowing I have no business here. It hits me hard this day, the smile is now a cracked display. The oceans wake threatens. I curse my own deficient character. Lack of constraint, lusting for what can never be mine, worlds that can never intertwine. The tide recedes and I get up from my lonely place. Knowing another time might have shown me a little pity affording me time to walk the forbidden city. of your skin. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
||
| © Copyright 2004 Susan Caldwell - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
The tide recedes and I get up from my lonely place. Knowing another time might have shown me a little pity affording me time to walk the forbidden city. of your skin. wow!!! instantly, this takes you to a marvelous place, yet the ending was like an enrollment in the mystical... |
||
muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
the whole poem sings...but that last line...perfect finish!!! |
||
|
Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"The oceans wake threatens. I curse my own deficient character. Lack of constraint, lusting for what can never be mine, worlds that can never intertwine." Now there's a verse I wish I'd written. Nice job on this Myrtle...  |
||
|
passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow! |
||
|
JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I like this...one of my favorites...James |
||
Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Whooo hooo, but did I loved this one Susan! |
||
|
Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Knowing another time might have shown me a little pity affording me time to walk the forbidden city. of your skin just awesome. |
||
|
Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Oh, yes! Wonderful write! |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yet I question just what it is that leads me. Knowing I have no business here. ~*~ And yet, who is to say that we aren't exactly where we belong, because we don't yet know what is behind the next moment? Good job here, Susan. |
||
|
babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
Knowing another time might have shown me a little pity affording me time to walk the forbidden city. of your skin. oooo...that's niiiice... **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
||
|
Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Magnificent Susan, absolutely. Maree  and I am haunted |
||
|
Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
wonderful ma'am... very nicely done indeed.. |
||
|
Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Incredible Susan, very well done. |
||
|
Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
sounds like you are being bad in your mind please call 1800dialaspank enjoyed this touch ms |
||
|
Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you all!  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
||
|
Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
glad I didn't miss this one! and LOL at a previous reply pick up that phone  |
||
|
Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I believe... this has become my favorite from you... so very well done Susan.. Bravo! |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
