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It Was My Summer Then
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It Was My Summer Then |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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I stood in a wealth of sand foot steps indented all around The sound of seagulls and the sea and I a child to the foam of this home Crunch the one foot held in taking the markings from my belief that I could draw myself that way within the clean just made entered into the pool so real it seems then jerks the girlhood from my dreams Run I say and I run climbing the ice plant cliffs the rodent hole my lift away away from the current’s climb I’m just a child I whine in sympathy for the color photograph gone oh gone lacking I can’t look back Yet I hear the call and I fall up myself to save to land again just like before within my grave it was my summer then |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Oh, my! Martie, hang on to those memories. I remember summer, too....this poem makes me sad but it is so well written. Be well and I hope 2005 is a good year for you.  .......jo |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I wanted you to know that read this, but will think it out a bit, and be back as I found this a very sad moment. I too wish 2005 is your year Martie, I truly, truly do. |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
"run I say and I run..." "...it was my summer then.." pretty much sums it up  enjoyed the read |
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J.Samm Member
since 2004-01-12
Posts 415Iloilo City, Philippines |
i could vividly see the little girl in the poem...emotions that dwell in memories can still be so real...well-done! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
away away from the current’s climb This was a dramatic moment, so powerfully and masterfully rendered, dear Martie. There are voices rising from the past and can’t be forgotten …. even though it was your summer then … Love and hugs. Margherita  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you always have a way with words and I'm thankful for that Happy New Year to you Martie |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah honey... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
There are dreams we want to come true, and there are dreams......like this. I know where this comes from, and I know the depth of sympathy and caring in the heart that brought it to be...and the darker side of the angst within it. Like Mysteria, I hope this will be your year. Climb, and let whatever can lift you, lift...and stay off of those slippery-inside iceplants.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
bravo ma'am... bravo... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This left me with such an ache.. I wanted to reach out my hand to help lift you up.. I do hope 2005 is good to you dear Martie. Heart-hugs In the midst of winter, |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
summers always were lovely when you wore them kewl stuff lil one |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie T'is a strong tea of brew, but I thank you.  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
the rodent hole my lift away away from the current’s climb There is wealth of more than sand in these words... Excellent write! |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Martie - what a moving write. Sad but beautiful and there's always another summer sometime somewhere. A new year always brings in change but may it be a pleasant and peaceful transition for you. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I understand this deeply - or at least it speaks to me in that manner - well done - SusanEvery action generates a force that returns to us in like kind . . . let us choose compassion and love |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
When I was a child I had a reoccuring dream about a big wave....it swallowed everthing...was coming towards my family and me and oh so many people playing unaware on the beach. I tried to tell them to run, but no one heard me, so I was running alone. The wave took everyone behind me, as I looked back one more time, from the cliff. The tsunami has brought back this memory of the nightmare I had as a child. I tried to write it as I remember. Thank you so much for reading and for your understanding replies. I think there is a bigger hurt behind the poem, from my childhood and from now...the wave, just a symbol of it. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - you say so very much so very well in your writing - I hope all your future waves are small ones that do no harm - and the deep hurt is healed by the love energy of so many that know you - Paul |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Much emotion echoing through time. Vivid imagery! |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Great write! ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ Everything you 'feel' ... you make us feel through your penning~ The ache is unmistakeably there ... remembered in times of concern~ Stand the vigil dear one ... the wave will crest and then ebb~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Such beautiful poetry! Amazing write, Martie JL |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Crunch the one foot held in taking the markings from my belief that I could draw myself that way within the clean just made entered into the pool so real it seems then jerks the girlhood from my dreams You write so real and true Martie, and always you glow in the softest kind of light. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Yes....what Bluesy said...definately. hugs, Chris ~The soul that can speak through the eyes can also kiss with a gaze~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I adore this |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
now if we could only get your fondest daydreams to come true |
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saved_by_grace Member
since 2005-01-08
Posts 332In the arms of God... |
Martie...this was beautifully written, but it breaks my heart to know that you are going through this kind pain and sorrow. :'( Hoping that it will all be minimal this year...and that the wave is just that...a wave. Some thing to kiss the shore and break away. Hugs, Becka |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
What a beutiful song.. This could be the refrain or chorus.. "The sound of seagulls and the sea and I a child to the foam of this home" I would love to hear it sung by Judy Collins or Loreena McKennitt.. _________ice/ford ><> |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
So often events in the present can trigger memories of the past. Such a tragic event has brought back your recurring dream of the past. A sad, yet beautifully written piece of poetry. Hugs with love, Linda |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice write |
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