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The Ship Chandler's Clerk
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The Ship Chandler's Clerk |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
The Ship Chandler's Clerk She'd known rough men (a friend and brother) fresh from ships, their muscular laughter stomping up the wharf, spilling into the streets and shops and drawing looks from women delicately married. Waiting to speak with the chandler's clerk she took a moment to reflect. On a shelf, a pair of black sea boots, highly buffed, caught the sunlight as if to anticipate the dark depth of a first mate's features. From a rack a wool pilot's coat looked broad and weighty. At the counter, a man of affairs, perhaps a broker, leaned intently as the slight clerk spoke of an overdue vessel. Lovingly he touched a chart, his long fingers tracing southerly. Words, distant and foreign eased as his voice mingled with the latent noise of gear and equipment sold to a ship stranded and breaking up even as they spoke. Suddenly he bit his lip, revealing a tongue tip that made her thoughts flick to the previous week when her eyes had caught his thin, hard chest glistening with sweat in the August heat. RMW [This message has been edited by RMW (12-23-2004 09:49 AM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...Damn!! This is excellent! Warm thought on a cold winter's day. Well done sir...well done! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A vignette... but far from warmth, I feel a sense of hardship, doom, and sadness... An excellent, telling write... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Suddenly he bit his lip, revealing a tongue tip that made her thoughts flick to the previous week when her eyes had caught his thin, hard chest glistening with work in the August heat" The shy girl shows another side... *smile" "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Yes, an excellent telling. I like the way you've foreshadowed the situation. A moving write. miscellanea |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Enchantress, Sunshine, Susan and Miscellanea ....... thank you for the encouragement. It helps ......... very much. Bob |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Wow. Great write!! Enjoyed  ~~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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