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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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I close my eyes when things get too hard and there in my far off never land You… You are there. wrapping me in arms no longer around another understanding the child of me yet loving the woman all the more You caress my cheek and kiss away the worry of never knowing what it means to truly be known You… behind my eyes the dream of what we gave up for what was safe You add color to this part of me the vibrancy of purple the blinding light of yellow You… reflect that color back to me so unselfishly and I want that night back so I can stay this time "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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milkweed Junior Member
since 2004-09-07
Posts 42fields of gold |
The depth of this poem is so eloquently reflected; I think your colors shine through really nicely. Season's best to you. (And, thank you for posting to my poem, Susan.) |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Beautiful. Eric |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
oh damn Susan, this one was so honest and I could feel the pain in the words... and warmth in the memory.... well done gal, very very well done... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Loving memories do have a way of keeping us warm when winds blow cold...  Linda |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
and I want that night back so I can stay this time ******************************************' until the rewind, just view it in memory's tape for now; if only, if only, we knew what would haunt us later, but how could we? very well expressed on this universal blunder of lovefools |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is SO beautiful Susan! The season's best to you and yours.  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
gentle with wings and a garter enjoyed this ms susie C |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
"I close my eyes when things get too hard and there in my far off never land You… You are there. wrapping me in arms no longer around another understanding the child of me yet loving the woman all the more" I loved that part. BEAUTIFUL WRITE! ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you, you wonderful people!! I enjoyed writing this one very much..  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
What wonderful thoughts here, so eloquently penned. An exceptional write. TD |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Susan, this is the sweetest poem...brought back some of my own memories that I sometimes wish I could do over again, too. I hope your holidays are filled with love and joy. .....jo |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"the dream of what we gave up for what was safe" I never lived that way when I was young, but I have come to understand it. Great writing!!! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ah... this one ma'am... touches something in me... tried to put it into words... but simply couldn't find them... was going to e-mail you and wish you the Best of Holidays.. but seems the grinch stole the mail server..lol... so I'll do it here.. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you all.. and Ron? well..you know. and find that grinch and slug him for me. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You… You are there. wrapping me in arms no longer around another understanding the child of me yet loving the woman all the more You caress my cheek and kiss away the worry of never knowing what it means to truly be known You… behind my eyes ~*~ I like this "do over" Susan... and thank you for the e-mail!  |
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stevebrklynnyc Member
since 2004-01-04
Posts 292GA, Camden |
"the dream of what we gave up for what was safe" Maybe someday you can understand. I will always be here, always regret, wishing, hoping, I still care and worry, always. Dont let time consume us. I still love you regardless. You did not give up, I did. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Gentle and good....the way a poem by a woman (a woman) ought to be.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Of those things we would undo Of those acts we come to rue None speak loud as choices made Now that moment just won't fade. Beautiful phrasing, Susan, this is my favorite: "and I want that night back so I can stay this time " Happy Holidays. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
"You… behind my eyes the dream of what we gave up for what was safe You add color to this part of me the vibrancy of purple the blinding light of yellow You… reflect that color back to me so unselfishly and I want that night back so I can stay this time " I love these lines..they speak volumes! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Steve, this so wasn't about you or for you...that time is done and over, move on. And thank you to the rest of you for your kind words  I love you all."cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Susan, I imagine that many can relate to this... I know I certainly do! You write with such honesty and poise. Thanks for sharing. miscellanea |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
understanding the child of me yet loving the woman all the more This is such a gift when it happens! Beautiful write! Love, Margherita |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Susan You hit a vein of words I've been think about for a good while. I hadn't written them. I suppose I just did. Take care Dave You on a parking lot car not worth a lot In a never never land No the payments were too grand Wondering how to ask to help Cables on a battery that never delivered Your defence mechanism and self Allowed me to take the baptism Shopping back home Help you to the door Grab the frozen stuff It defrosts more and more Opening the freezer Stack it by the labels I need to change Am I Cain or Able Slumped on the settee Cool as frozen mince Do I look all right she says Thank God there is some Prince Shall I make coffee Where did you put it I'll check the freezer As life moved in a woman's pattern Swirling softly changing That she deftly felt Might be worth the raising Fingers in the flour But not in the dough Just dusted hands In the flow |
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