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Jessie Carstein
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since 2004-01-08
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0 posted 2004-07-28 06:32 PM


The world rushes by my face,
This strange world about me,
Smiling couples hand in hand,
They fill me with glee.

But as the time goes by,
And I still stand alone,
I feel rage burning within,
I am truly on my own.

I am the image in the desert,
That fades as you near,
I scream a loud concerto,
Yet I’m a voice you never hear.

I have waited in these shadows,
For days of agony and strife,
Ignored and forgotten like ancient toys,
This my fate for life.

I watch as you shovel in their manure,
Kissing their well made hole,
Whilst the arrival is ignored,
It all takes its toll.

So I shall bid thee farewell,
Though you won’t ever hear,
This is my message,
It is quiet and clear…


© Copyright 2004 Jessie Carstein - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2004-07-28 07:31 PM


I am the image in the desert,
That fades as you near,
I scream a loud concerto,
Yet I’m a voice you never hear


hardly invisible...

love this verse...sometimes I feel the same

M

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with you
2 posted 2004-07-28 07:37 PM


this is very very well done!
Susan
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since 2004-03-27
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walking the surreal
3 posted 2004-07-28 07:41 PM


Yes, once upon a time I felt invisible.  It is not nice.  But happily, there is a magic potion that renders you seen -- it is called learning to love, yourself, your friends, your enemies.  I hope you will find yourself, for once you see yourself clearly, then others shall too.

  Susan

btw, I still have my Romulan cloaking device for those times when I want to be invisible.  Works really well

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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4 posted 2004-07-28 08:14 PM


"I am the image in the desert,
That fades as you near,
I scream a loud concerto,
Yet I’m a voice you never hear."

I hear you.  I especially liked this verse.  


Jeffrey Carter
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State of constant confusion!
5 posted 2004-07-29 02:13 AM


Extremely well written... there are times that I WANT to be invisible ... "you done good"
Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2004-07-29 05:29 AM


Jessie~  I am enjoying your style very much!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
7 posted 2004-07-29 05:41 AM


then step out of the shadows and be heard
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