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gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

0 posted 2004-07-18 08:23 PM

In certain areas
the earth is still nervous
shaking in underground
trembles
as if

it had a heartbeat

sodden
with dusty rains

and news
of your redeeming features;

you always say goodbye
and tell me
you always loved me

all along

But you never cover our shallow graves
stick around to see
how
dirt

sticks around

heart, eyes and skin

long after you've supposedly washed it off.

You never even bother
to spy upon
the many lives
I wrestled up
from
the remainder
of soiled pride

the attempts
that trail and dwindle
to halt

power lines
fallen
like paths
across mud.

New things never worked

when no electricity spun
hammock webs
for me to laze in

no tangled sparks
of
light
for me to read all the books

you wanted me to.

Is this all
I'll ever watch you acknowledge

through wispered words
along
food chains

of survival
and death

through rumour

a scenic view

one desolate rolling hill
of
   d
    o
     w
      n
       w
       a
      r
     d

   s
    p
     i
      r
      a
     l
    l
   i
  n
g

Into shallow graves

of my own digging?

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

1 posted 2004-07-18 08:45 PM

Excellent.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2004-07-18 09:38 PM

SweetGemma~
I did NOT want this to end~

Absolutely compelling~
Breathtakingly beautiful~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

noles1@totcon.com

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

3 posted 2004-07-20 11:22 AM

Thankyou for the reads. You're very kind.

Sorry I havent appeared to be in here much, just know i am reading.

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

4 posted 2004-07-20 10:35 PM

What a poem! Skilled and creative! Great anaologies! Wow!

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2004-07-21 04:45 AM

gemma...wow

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

6 posted 2004-07-21 07:56 AM

Hi Gemma and good morning, your words
leave me speechless...

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

7 posted 2004-07-21 08:43 AM

My Dear Gem Drop, I am beyond impressed with your talent!

Loveya!
LL

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

8 posted 2004-07-21 07:42 PM

loved it

yv
Senior Member

since 2003-05-30

Posts 574

9 posted 2004-07-21 09:31 PM

What is there to say?! It was deep. Emotional. Lovely. I know this is a strange word to use with a poem as heartwrenchingly deep as this one, but what can I say?! The words were beautiful.

Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent.

SEA