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Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2004-07-16 01:01 PM

Dead light fails
To creep under the rim of barren limb
and illuminate the underside
Where bark peeled in decay
Hangs loose
               Yet swarms with beetle
And I…
   Remember how it looked
When alive it filled with green
Bringing each spring the hope of shade
Each winter the comfort of abstracts
To dance in beams of moon
Across our bodies
As if we became the tangle of roots below
And our own joining was that of earth
And tree
               Of sky
And shadow
                         How long now
Before it comes down
Just as we did
In thud of storm to splinter
Gouging rough scars
Leaving our own skin too tender

I’ll draw this in black and white
  Scrawls slipping from line
To line
                                       To line
Now broken
Then join the wind

To play about on thoughts of how
Both the tree and you
          Grew

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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1 posted 2004-07-16 01:06 PM

you sure have an awesome way of telling the story

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2004-07-16 01:07 PM

WOW.....

this leaves me breathless, and in awe...

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

3 posted 2004-07-16 01:08 PM

And I…
   Remember how it looked
When alive it filled with green
Bringing each spring the hope of shade
Each winter the comfort of abstracts
To dance in beams of moon
Across our bodies
As if we became the tangle of roots below
And our own joining was that of earth
And tree
               Of sky
And shadow


Capt, your way with words truly amazes me...Enjoyed your thoughts very much..

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2004-07-16 01:15 PM

Ron

So many trees here have been devistated by the bark beetle. The comparison you make is heart rending. Time moves on...and thankfully nature usually sees to growing new things.

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

5 posted 2004-07-16 01:32 PM

many thanks to you all.. for the kind words about these scribblings of mine.. they in my mind are undeserved as I am always humbled by the words of others I read here... but I thank you for the read..and the thoughts

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

6 posted 2004-07-16 01:42 PM

smiles...how soft, affirming and lovely

Very much enjoyed reading...

Remember how it looked
When alive it filled with green
Bringing each spring the hope of shade
Each winter the comfort of abstracts
To dance in beams of moon
Across our bodies
As if we became the tangle of roots below
And our own joining was that of earth
And tree
               Of sky
And shadow

Nature is so good to us, isn't it...this was to be applauded!

And this....

                         How long now
Before it comes down
Just as we did
In thud of storm to splinter
Gouging rough scars
Leaving our own skin too tender

that it does, but...the skin can heal and callose so that scars can not even be felt...

I’ll draw this in black and white
  Scrawls slipping from line
To line
                                       To line
Now broken
Then join the wind

Whewww, I'm wiping tears...how wonderfully written!  Thank you for sharing

James_A_Fraser
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since 2003-09-03

Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines

7 posted 2004-07-16 02:03 PM

The growing never stops -- whether we do or not.

Brilliantly written, and brilliantly inspired.

~~J

Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

8 posted 2004-07-16 02:22 PM

Trees can feel so comfortable somehow . . .
Perhaps that's why we identify with them, and why we mourn their loss.
Enjoyed this.

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

9 posted 2004-07-16 03:02 PM

Wonderful story. Enjoyed the read.

JL

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

10 posted 2004-07-16 03:59 PM

Cpat,
I read your response about being humbled. You have more talent in the peck of a computer key than I have in my whole body! Truly, you are an artist! It's a pleasure to read your work.
misc'e

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

11 posted 2004-07-16 04:07 PM

quote:
To dance in beams of moon
Across our bodies
As if we became the tangle of roots below
And our own joining was that of earth
And tree
Of sky
And shadow

oh, I really like that
*sigh*

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

12 posted 2004-07-16 05:05 PM

Amazing write as always Captain...
Very much enjoyed.
Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain ~

Sunshine

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Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

13 posted 2004-07-16 05:19 PM

And I…
Remember how it looked
When alive it filled with green
Bringing each spring the hope of shade
Each winter the comfort of abstracts
To dance in beams of moon
Across our bodies
As if we became the tangle of roots below
And our own joining was that of earth
And tree
Of sky
And shadow

~*~

I need to polish up the stars, Cap'n...
because you surely deserve them, for this...

Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

14 posted 2004-07-16 05:40 PM

*wipes the drool from her keyboard* Amazing storytelling...that's as sincere as I get

Kristen

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

15 posted 2004-07-16 05:55 PM

Very vivid imagery, my friend.

That closing line is so poignant.

Corinne

p.s. and yes, thank you, everything is well here. You?

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

16 posted 2004-07-16 11:16 PM

And I…
Remember how it looked
When alive it filled with green
Bringing each spring the hope of shade
Each winter the comfort of abstracts
To dance in beams of moon
Across our bodies
As if we became the tangle of roots below
And our own joining was that of earth
And tree
Of sky
And shadow
============================

you know of course the tree hugging moth is keeping this...

yes... you know.

I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

17 posted 2004-07-17 06:56 AM

Only you could paint the life and limb of a tree...so meaningful. I always enjoy your poetry C. It moves through me. Even the bittersweet is something painfully rich and admirable in your verse.

Love,
Reg

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

18 posted 2004-07-17 08:05 PM

"How long now
Before it comes down
Just as we did
In thud of storm to splinter
Gouging rough scars
Leaving our own skin too tender"

Absolutely fabulous writing!

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

19 posted 2004-07-17 08:40 PM

" How long now
Before it comes down
Just as we did
In thud of storm to splinter
Gouging rough scars
Leaving our own skin too tender"

...and it hurts. Again, you write it well..I felt the gouge.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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