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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Swish....Clunk! The sound of a door closing swiftly in his mind. “We need to talk.”.. Echoing over and over again...what could conceivably be the fuel of a fire that smoulders around him? Her perfume wafting, swirling, enticing, entrancing... For a moment, just a moment.. He was in another place...a secluded cove beside a beach where a trail of lover’s prints, side by side, danced merrily into the evening..as a gold and red sky turned to stars....the heavens blanketed them comfortably as a kiss lingered... “Jack!”.... “Pooof”... the daydream crashing down around him into shards of broken love...his eyes caught her own, her eyebrows raised...he knew this was time to be attentive and on his toes...No stutters, stammers or “GeeWhizzes.” She had a tear falling slowly from a beautiful eye. One which had soo deeply admired him...had watched him for hours, on days when the heat threw away a shirt, his tan line showing, and she giggled...spraying him with the hose....running swiftly away...and then he caught her...thrashing playfully, knowing where they would journey to... Would it ever repeat itself? Or, was this the final chapter of a storybook composed in real life?? They sat, sipping coffee. Her cup so dainty and flowery compared to his. No man would be caught with a woman’s coffee cup between his lips...unless of course, he were tempering it with his breath to ensure she did not burn those luscious, moist and inviting lips. Jack could sense Alana was very nervous about something. He just did not know what...He had speculated, asked many times within his mind and....zip, nada, zero....nyet! “Jack...I” The pause, bringing the still air to a standstill even more....the air of a crypt would have been a gale compared to this moment.... “Jack, I’m pregnant”... His spoon clunked in the bottom of his empty cup....the sound not so different from the click of the latch... |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Oy! Barry, you do spin a good one. I note that this does not state the end, so may one hope that this is not so? I feel as if I'm becoming lost within a cliff hanger and hoping he makes the jump successfully, landing on his feet . . . Until next week's episode! I'm hooked. Lead where you will, I will follow.  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx Susan, right about now...he should be....NOPE.. Can't tell ya.. Hope you have had a good weekend and your tools have not gotten lonely in that closet. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
 Ah, yes, the perfect ending! Yea! Much, much enjoyed this series, BJ!  .....jo |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Back again. Perhaps, this wasn't the end; I can see where you could go on. I guess I read in a "surprise" ending and took it for granted that was it. Anyway, bring it on if there is more....I am sure I will very much enjoy whatever more may flow.....jo |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Ah, Barry, I was just recently gifted an Ed Schempp Persian -- a most beautiful blade. I've not yet locked it away. Oh, and no veggies around tonight. Hmmmmm . . . Teasing -- I've got it tucked away in my drawer at work. You too have a good evening and a lovely Sunday.  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Jo... You almost jumped tooo quick...but that is ok... And nope, not yet...but I do believe the next will be the last...unless of course I am threatened or coerced to write any more afterwards.. Susan, Whewww...glad it is at work...cause I don't feel like a veggie tonite, certainly not one that is cooked and ready for cutting! Thanx... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
*clunk* |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magnus darling man, now that was a surprise, I love the series, the suspense was perfect. And yes I suspect there will be a few more, I’d coerced you but I doubt if I’d get away with threatening to let the wench out. Absolutely beautiful writing darling man, your gift is to twist words into patterns of wonder and I’m utterly bespelled by the way you craft them so well as always Mushy   Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...the daydream crashing down around him into shards of broken love... ~*~ Ok....I'm in your place now... I got a little confused over "time placement" with this, but I went back and re-read the series... I'm with you now... More, please.  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Barry barry quite contrary ~ What a tangled web you weave! ~ Let me know when the book's out!  A Fan  |
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