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Magnus
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0 posted 2004-08-06 02:28 PM


She thrusts and parries, ducks and dives
skilled she is with glistening knives.
Able to brew up quite a stir
and this man begs her call him "Sir".

An art, a gift, sobering feel
as flashes glint from hardened steel.
Her hands demure but deft you see
could carve a roast of me or thee!

The blade slides fast through paper thin
as though mere butter instead of skin.
A heart of softness,frills and fun
while she pins a rat on the run.

to see her, one would never ascertain
that the blood of warriors runs through her veins
and though her trusted course is peace and love
she'll give you "what for" if push comes to shove

Her deadly tools are from ages ago
blades and bastons, stealthy arrows and bows
throw in a tomahawk, a whip or two
then just stand way back, see what she can do

fear not, dear friend, though danger be her name
she's laughter and joy, truly loves the game
of teasing and taunting with harmless jest
unless of course with real peril she’s met

The blade, the ax, stiletto too.
All tools to her, weapons to you.
A turkey carved without a scrap
to feed the dog or a starved sap

And when he comes to ring her bell
he wears full armor of finest mail.
To keep her from thinking it’s merely him
desperately in need of a shave and a trim.

For she's a kitty cat with milk, you see
Gown of red satin and soft silken weave
Her closet locked to keep her tools
away from him or other fools.

Tim, the Tool Man cannot compare!!!!
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© Copyright 2004 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-08-06 02:40 PM


Magnus darling man and Susan dear heart, oh wow this is a duet to be proud of. The combination of lines is outstanding, I simply can’t tell which of you wrote which line. That is a mark of how well you two write together.

The poem is truly wonderful and I love the pulse and the energy within this brilliantly presented piece

Love and warm stuff
as always
Mushy


Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

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2 posted 2004-08-06 03:59 PM


Two of my favorite poets with a wonderful, fun poem.....now this is a keeper.  Enjoyed this BJ & Susan.   ....jo
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3 posted 2004-08-06 06:45 PM


Barry, I really like how this turned out.  This was great fun, working together   Any time . . .

Marsha and Jo, thanks.  Sir truly is an excellent poet whose lead was easily followed.  I'm so glad you both enjoyed our fun --

Hugs all --   Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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4 posted 2004-08-06 06:47 PM


Cute write you guys
Magnus
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5 posted 2004-08-06 06:48 PM


Susan,  thanx bunches for the opportunity to
let my two hairs down and have some fun.  Of
course,  you realize that I did it out of
sheer terror and fear...

Ladies,  we do appreciate your comments, it
was a blast writing this.

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6 posted 2004-08-06 06:55 PM


nice you two!!!!!!!!
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7 posted 2004-08-06 06:58 PM


You two make a great team!  Like someone else said, I could hard tell where one began and the other ended.  A nice meld...
A pleasure to read!
           miscellanea

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8 posted 2004-08-07 01:05 AM


fear not, dear friend, though danger be her name
she's laughter and joy, truly loves the game
of teasing and taunting with harmless jest
unless of course with real peril she’s met

The blade, the ax, stiletto too.
All tools to her, weapons to you.
A turkey carved without a scrap
to feed the dog or a starved sap


What a hoot!  Kudos, you two!!!!

Startime55
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9 posted 2004-08-07 11:01 AM


CLAPPING!!!!BRAVO!!!! BRAVO!!! A poem to be charished...I did not want it to end...A warrior woman she is indeed with a heart that's big and welcoming...**hugs** you both did a magnificent job...

LeeJ
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10 posted 2004-08-07 11:39 AM


chimming all of the above...a partnership of pure personalities array this neighborhood of PIP

Outstanding....standing there with candle lit while screaming BRAVO!!!!!

Very much enjoyed.

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11 posted 2004-08-07 01:49 PM


Susan & Magnus~
What a delightful treat this is~

Applauding loudly from Florida~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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12 posted 2004-08-07 06:37 PM


Well, let me tell you, my two dear friends, this was a treat to read ~ and a laugh and a half! Laughing Baby

And it was written very well to boot!

Karate  Knife  Target

Kudos Judos!
Flowers
Linda

Susan
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13 posted 2004-08-07 07:46 PM


Smiling at you all and hugs.  And E.A., you're little emoticons are too cute -- lol.  Barry gave a good strong lead.  I am so glad you all enjoyed this for it was a lot of fun.

And Barry, no fear dearest Sir-- I'll save my real choppy choppy for the veggies

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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14 posted 2004-08-07 07:50 PM


tooltime, poetstyle

LOL, I really enjoyed this duet

Magnus
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15 posted 2004-08-07 08:32 PM


Thanx to all for the comments.  Linda,  love
the little emoticons....unique...where did
you get them?

Susan,  thanx for taking your anger and
frustration out of the veggies....NO, I
am not a carrot...a prune maybe...  You
did very well for a first duet.  Thank
you for a little laughter...

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