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Fighting for Tranquility
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Fighting for Tranquility |
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kari Member
since 1999-10-03
Posts 104Hyde Park, Ut, USA |
I wish feelings could be more sober Then I could abolish the pain Illustrate my love for you That's so hard to explain I wish you could see my thoughts I think to the best of my ability Stinging words I had to voice Fighting for Tranquilty Forgive me of my confusion My hands that wipe the tears I do what I feel is best for me What might kill depressing fears I try to express it; write it out Words flow from my liquid mind Love elucidates from my heart My heart that appears so blind I wish feelings could be more sober Then I could abolish the pain Illustrate my love for you That's so hard to explain |
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armanca Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211Tennessee |
I enjoyed this poem!!!  It's so true....Carman |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Very expressive. I too, have felt this way. And the writing does help eventually The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Kari...great poem.... Verse 2 struck back and hit me hard.... Very well done...and so expressive Jennifer Lee Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual. |
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kari Member
since 1999-10-03
Posts 104Hyde Park, Ut, USA |
Thank you ALL! I appreciate the feedback! |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Very nice, Kari. Liked the 3rd verse. JOY |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Hard to explain, indeed. You've captured it well, though. Michael |
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