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The Sum of All Universes
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The Sum of All Universes |
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Jana Tovey Member
since 2000-05-30
Posts 257USA |
I am no dark lady standing before you, you who are good and true, but I am hailed as the spawn of the devil. What would you have me do? Profess belief for a concept that I can’t grasp no matter how hard and how often I try to behold it? I have begged for that sign, one sign, is it too much to ask for? and when no response came from on high I gave up hope and built my own philosophy to live by. Am I any less than you? Do I not follow the same rigid guidelines... making sure that I do unto others as I would have them do unto me, giving back all that I receive... And more, when possible. And do you judge me? Does the Bible not say... “Judge not that ye be not judged.” Wise words although I believe they originated from a man... a wise man who saw the need to govern and regulate humanity in large numbers. I do not denounce these words, just beg to differ on their origin. I embrace instead the energy that exists within us all... beautiful physics says that energy can be created... but never destroyed. My God is energy...everlasting all encompassing, Energy...more than the sum of all the suns in this and all other Universes. |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Wow, the depth you went into with that poem is great. With one basic message in mind, you could break it down into so much and still not cloud up the meaning or be repetetive. nice job. Jeremy D. Halstead |
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Jana Tovey Member
since 2000-05-30
Posts 257USA |
Thanks Jeremy. I put alot of thought into this poem. |
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Necro Draconis Member
since 2000-05-19
Posts 115 |
Wonderful  I totally agree. I've been waiting for a poem like this for a long time. |
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gothicmoth Member
since 2000-06-05
Posts 89 |
A friend pointed this poem out to me and I'm glad she did. This is well thought out as you said as the speaker seems to be looking back on years of decisions and struggles, both inner and outer."and when no response/ came from on high/I gave up hope/and built my own/philosophy to/live by." This is how many of the world's strongest beliefs have been built. What caught my eye the most was: "Wise words/although I/believe they originated/from a man.../a wise man/who saw the need/to govern and regulate/humanity in large numbers." The short phrasing empasizes the struggle, the thinking, the looking for the right words and the emphasis itself the speaker is putting on their thoughts. This is true throughout the whole poem. Very well written indeed. |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
I agree, very well written, I live by my laws, not man's nor man's books from history, what is written is by man. I enjoyed the strength of it all. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
I see the idea i live the reality purity of mind is the key see all that is true not the outer reality look inside see what you realy are then you will understand what we must do what must be done in the name of humanity "Prophet!" said I, "thing of evil!- prophet still, if bird or devil!- Whether Tempter sent, or whether tempest tossed thee here ashore, Desolate yet all undaunted, on this desert land enchanted- On this home by horror haunted- tell me truly, I implore- Is there- is there balm in Gilead?- tell me- tell me, I implore!" Quoth the Raven, "Nevermore." |
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