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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
Can't sleep,so i lie awake in bed, No rest for my sorely tortured head. I focus on the wood panels, to forget my thoughts....turn the channels. Staring at the waves of wood grain, but i still can't escape the pain. Suddenly the wood work swirls, takes on images as ghosts unfurl in front of my dazed eyes dance myriads of haunting lies. Over there beside the bookshelf, on the wall i see myself. Lost in a tizzy of x’s & o’s, Circled by watchful carrion crows. They watch me with eyes bulging, Waiting,the suspense indulging. Watching & waiting for me to expire, Circling and watching from higher & higher. I hate them,they wait to devour me, They’re aroung you too,my friend,can’t you see? The stage unfold ‘cross my bedroom walls, Now I can almost hear their ravenous calls. I would rescue you, But they’re imobile…..the feet my mind drew. I don’t want to see, my eyes I try to close, But my lids are thin,the blood still shows. Then I realize my eyes are open wide, Streaming down with tears I cried. And I find I’m staring into my bedroom drapes, Crimson…..which I mistook for bloody shapes. Thank god it was just dreamed, I’m not trapped in the wood work,as it seemed. What would I do without you ,my best friend, Thank god you’re alive……my Godsend < !signature--> And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson [This message has been edited by Swåmp¤Faerÿie (edited 05-30-2000).] |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Swamp*Faeryie,....oooh this is good,...damn good. I can never sleep and as soon as I read the first line here I knew this would be an interesting read. Gosh the things that go through your head in the night, when all seems quiet....I knew you would make this work. You're good. The imagery is great. *Peace. |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Swampe, Your poetry is even good, when posing as a piece of wood! Great job. Marcy |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
Thank you spitfire and alle'cram!! I kinda thought this was a cool idea,but i think i should revise the words,they just don't seem to fit. But poetry is a venture,anyway you look at it =] Thanks for your kind words dearies!! swampie |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Your x's and o's say alot in love, a new?? anyway, the crows seem to be waiting to see is how this is going to go ?? anyway, great imagery, I like crows, I use to do a craft show that in the morning there would be thousands all over. Very large and black. Love it kid. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Necro Draconis Member
since 2000-05-19
Posts 115 |
I love it! Great descriptive detail and kept you wanting to read more. By Necro Draconis Let nature guide your soul. |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
Thank you Joel and Necro.... Joel would you happen to know what the differnce is between a crow and a raven??¿ It's been a recent topic for dispute in my house. We can't decide if it's size,or just 2 differnt names for the same thing?? swamp faeryie And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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Jeffyf Junior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 49Muncie, IN |
This is fanominal! I love the use of the carrion birds. So powerfully dark and gloomy! Wonderful! Jeffrey |
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