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A Step Into Darkness
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A Step Into Darkness |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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A STEP INTO DARKNESS Walking this world day by day, In search of light, losing my way. Alone, I call, alone, I cry. Alone, I wait, alone I'll die. The writing's there in verses, fair. For all known, I've known none who'd care. A child once stood where this man stands, With gleaming eyes, with unscathed hands. A man now stands where a child cried As, one by one, the dreams all died. With red-rimmed eyes, no more the wise, Scarred hands clinched tight to one word lies. The voice of night, it calls my name, Without mercy, but without shame. I walk the world by eventide, For pain's release, sacrifice pride. Yet, still I hear that voice so dear Drawing me ever, ever near. So, now, willfully I follow, Emotionless, numb and hollow. Seeking the caster of this song, It's spell, it's master, ‘er in long To share in verse, if but by curse, The passion I die to disperse. Wandering, deviant, the course, A man offering no remorse. Obscurely taking, (stagnant hue), A field in view I thought I knew. Mind, rendered useless, idle, cares Nothing for what the morrow shares; Nothing for a hope, depleted, Nothing for a dream, defeated. The tastes of sunshine seldom shone On memories of life, alone, Or faceless clouds on riddled skies Still whispering in one word lies. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Awesome, of course.... So, instead of bright sunny graphics, I have to give you partly cloudy???  ------------------ Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done: For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits, Than I am sure I have in my whole five. ~ ²1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75 |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
nice ... not exactly clear as to what the meaning was, if there was one ... the imagery was quite vivid ... well written  ) (Well at least I enjoyed it, not that I claim to be an expert!) |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
This is incredibly dramatic Michael. I think you rendered it with perfect grace! Wow, is about all I can add! NO- my impression is that it is about a most common dilemma- regret. (or did I completely miss the point Michael?) ------------------ It's so cool, it's so swell, living here on Ice Planet hell! -Psychotica- |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
It's going to sound like I'm repeating myself here but I think you are a marvelous poet! You have such depth of feeling, it almost hurts just to read your work! I absolutely love this!  |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Well I usually don't elaborite on my poetry very much but a few of you seem to find this piece obscure. It is a poem about hope, faith, and love. More specifically, the lost belief in these (one word lies). It's about innocense lost and the willingness, almost eagerness to share a darker side of ourselves with the world rather than stand on dead ideals, alone. Michael |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Ok, I printed it out (it's always easier to study if I can hold it in my hands) and re-reviewed this. I think that perhaps I didn't read it quite clearly the first time. I think my mind locked on one phrase (a very powerful one!) and that is what set the tone of the preceding words: The taste of sunshine seldom shone, On memories of life, alone, I think that was what caused me to think about regrets. But looking back and ignoring that phrase, I can see a little of what you mean! Either way, you made me have to stop and think -thank you! ------------------ It's so cool, it's so swell, living here on Ice Planet hell! -Psychotica- |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
I loved it.!.. Can I ask a question? "One word lies"... define please or am I just being "blonde"? ------------------ Kay-lynn **A dream is a wish your heart makes :) |
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DreadedOne Member
since 1999-10-25
Posts 51Odessa, TX |
Deep poem, Michael. This is like the epitome of aloneness. I, too, answer the call of Darkness. ------------------ D.O. Fear is overcomable, life is fleeting. Dreams are reachible, love completing. |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Haunting.Excellent. ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
A field in view I thought I knew....haunting.. Jen ------------------ Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual. |
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Deep Blue Me Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396By a big lake |
The alone lines drove me into the dirt,M. This is exquisite. DB |
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fatwah Junior Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 16 |
i enjoyed the soft slide into your ideas, the imagery was particularly enjoyable |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
I'm with DB Exquisite!! ------------------ Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing... ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Alone, I call, alone, I cry. Alone, I wait, alone I'll die. I love those lines......so desolate ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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